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Thumbling

Submitted by gregwa8 on Fri, 2019-04-12 01:32

Even a boy the size of a thumb
With a brain as big as a pastry crumb
Wasn't as meager or as dumb
As the men who tried to capitalize on his oddity
Use his unique condition as commodity
After getting a bit of their gold
Thumbling simply escaped
Into a mouse hole

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Based on a Grimm fairytale
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