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thoughts
most thoughts don't mean too much they concern like and dislike and our relations
with simple things coffee cigarette's music television.
there is a unifying spirit and dimension .
most fish in the ocean feel this; they usually have good thoughts bad thoughts
disappear rapidly like rocks thrown into the ocean. the question is why we have bad thoughts it's like ants think and feel on a burnt crust thoughts that are too positive
usually harmonize like ants on cooler cherries in the pie like rotten peaches
or a sunburn
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Last few words:
i hope this will make people happier and harmony
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Not Explicit Content
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