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A Heart In My Eyes (May Contest)

Submitted by gregwa8 on Thu, 2019-05-30 23:01

I’m a bundle of nerves
That fire
Like a firing squad
Or shoot
Like a shooting star

I am guilt and fear
A kid who has put himself
In the corner

I am hope
Like a pelican’s huge beak
Scooping up
The water of life

I am ecstatic joy
And a daily mourner

Like Whitman says
“I contain multitudes”

I am a neural network
A heart in my foot
A heart in my chest
A heart in my eyes

The dark of day
And the combustable
Light of night

I shine bright enough
Yes, I am learning to shine

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