I have a big project, and need your help!

Hello there folks, thanks for taking the time to read, I know there's lots to read here! Anyway, I've had some ideas for a big project, a large poem, not epic (I don't think I could keep a subject going that long!) but something at least about 20 stanzas. What I've got so far is the first 2 stanzas of said poem and I'd like you to have a look a look. Now they are very rough and will need re-done with or without suggestions, but there's enough to show the mood, theme, feel and style at least. This as some of you may realise is, not really an ode, but more of a nod to Don Jaun, which I am in the middle of reading and loving. The rhyme scheme is the same, and yes it's about a young man's life. But mine is set present day and in Scotland. And rather than show off the marvelous smart, handsome dashing figure like Jaun, my character, Johnny (name may change!) is a bit of the opposite. Also I like morbid poems, as you'll see shortly, and this should be an underlying theme throughout. Anyway, all help, suggestions, criticism and whatever is much appreciated. The Life and Times of Johnny (working title) Little Johnny was a murderous one, And here his story I shall bestow Upon the reader. For he neglected son With fell action, damned his young soul to go To hell. What he done, cannot be undone But can be told to prevent further woe. Edipus see, was only a myth, but Dear Johnny was the one that made the cut. But beginnings are best done at the start, and so... Many would say be did not have a start, not poor of money but of love! All he Knew of love, was, the gentlemen in marts Whom his mother would meet. They'd come for tea, Then upstairs to the bedroom they'd dart. Forgetting the door so Johnny could see. He sit in his room and play solitaire, Mother fumbling and shrieking without a care. And there you are, rip away!