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I've been using a couple of different poetry sites, since most only allow one poem post a day and I need feedback on a lot of poems. There has been a lot of debate going on about reviewing. I believe constructive criticism is the best way to grow as a poet, you just have decide if that's truly want when you're posting. When you get to the point where you want to grow, you'll have to grow a thick skin, and keep in mind that we all have room for improvement. Now in light of this, I want to share with all of you a "review" I received on another poetry site.

Mind you - I don't mind criticism but this is what I received in reference to one of my poems:

This is exactly the sort of horribly overwritten, overmodified, cliché-riddled, abstraction-murdered piece one -- for obvious reasons -- recognizes right from the beginning as the work of a beginner who's trying to sound ever-so-poetic in all the wrong ways. Not only is the writing on a line-by-line basis bad, but, worse, the piece as a whole goes absolutely nowhere; what, after all, is the point of describing a purely mythical event? (NOTE: That's strictly a rhetorical question; do not attempt to answer.) Maybe you have something in mind, but whatever it is never made it into the writing. The end result is a pretty standard-issue example of sound and fury signifying nothing.

If this is generally representative of your writing, then it would appear that you have little to no serious acquaintanceship with contemporary poetry; until you do, you are unlikely to understand more than a tiny fraction of what's wrong with this piece and why. Aside from availing yourself of several of the anthologies in the recommended reading list stickied at the top of this forum (and at least a couple of the texts on writing poetry as well), you can make a start at coming to terms with some of these issues by studying carefully, thoroughly, and repeatedly Walt McDonald's essay "Advice I Wish I'd Been Told", which is probably the best brief introduction to serious poetry writing readily available. The relevant "Blurbs of Wisdom" threads will also be useful.

20 seconds after posting my response to this - I got banned from the site - here is my response: Wow - ok so, your site sounded like a good idea. I guess I was expecting more help than I'm getting here. I'm familiar with contemporary poets, my bookshelves are lined with many of them that I have read several times. I will acknowledge I am a novice poet, but from what I've seen here it sounds like you guys enjoy running people into the ground rather than helping them. It makes me wonder how many people here on this site might have written one or two of those books that's on the list you guys herd the more inexperienced people to. Screw this! I guess Bukowski was right! HA!

All I have to say is - I am very thankful for Neopoet.


Would you consider posting the poem in question, Blue???? I decided to look up Walt McDonald's essay and poetry.

Here's his essay that I think will be of *skillful means*....and he was Poet Laureate of Texas in 2001. So I found some poems. Love his stuff. I think this essay is good for our rag-tag group of poets. Will also be posting them in a blog along with a couple of his poems.

"Over the years, I've heard good advice from others; I wish they had told me sooner. Probably they did, but I didn't listen. What I'm about to say is what I constantly urge myself to do. I offer these comments to save us time, to help us strip off some ankle weights of language. The difference between second place and first place in the high jump, between the silver and the gold, is only about an inch. Ah, but "How glorious that inch / And that split-second longer in the air before the fall" (Robert Francis, "Excellence").

1. Resist Abstractions, and They Will Flee from You

General and abstract statements are easy to say, and usually flat. They don't show; they tell. Imagine friends stepping out into the hall and seeing something vivid and specific, then coming back into your room and summarizing all the specific, sensuous details they saw in abstract, general statements — like any of these: "He was a distinguished-looking man." "She looked angry." "She treated others with justice." "He had a strange way of fixing his hair." "He gave her costly gifts." "She reacted in a negative way."
I understand these claims — but I don't see or feel them as richly as I wish I could. The power of language is in vivid specifics that make us see — or hear, and feel, through sensuous images. A plot summary is not as vivid or powerful as seeing the movie. In order to make any of those statements quoted above, the writers might have seen specific details, but — instead of sharing them with readers — they have "ab-stracted" (drawn conclusions from, or taken from) their impressions and given us only the abstract notions of the experience — "distinguished-looking," "justice," "a negative way."
These are the kind of easy abstractions I'm likely to make in first drafts — when I'm simply trying to find a few lines for a poem. But go beyond first thoughts. I urge you to reach, to work hard; don't sit down like a couch potato, comfortable with the easy abstractions of your mind's first draft. A poem works best, for me, when the writer doesn't tell, but when he or she invents combinations of specific words to show us old facts in new ways. Poems with too many abstractions and not enough images tell about something, but don't move me as much as they could.
Abstractions and generalizations are like chunks of lead tossed on a pond of water — " the art of sinking in poetry." Abstractions are hired assassins; they're paid to hold you hostage, to keep you bound to your couch, in house arrest. They don't want you to travel, to see the vivid images of other regions; they hope you won't discover what you're missing. Now let's stop and admit some obvious facts about the craft of writing:
1) There are no rules. All I can do is describe what works for me in the best poems I read. All I can do is share the best advice I can to help you write better poems; all I can promise is to focus on what I admire.
2) Let's admit it: for some readers "anything goes" — just as in human behavior. Anything you wouldn't do in a civilized society (or in wilderness!), someone will do — and not simply get away with it, but may even be applauded for it. But why should I urge you to write like someone whose poems aren't the most exciting poems I can find?
3) In some of today's journals, you'll find anything — from sonnets, villanelles, and sestinas to blank verse, language poems, free verse, prose poems, poems that look like grocery lists, bits of flabby prose, and worse.
We know what a sonnet is. But now and then, someone will chop up a piece of pedestrian prose and give it a title such as "Sonnet." It may be the opposite of what we call a sonnet. But someone somewhere will publish it — even if in his garage on a second-hand mimeograph machine with a stapler. And that doesn't mean that good poems aren't sometimes published in such conditions.
4) Some poems are more powerful than others. Some give us more pleasure packed in a few words than we expected to find. I'm amazed at how some writers can make simple words implode. The images are stunning, vivid, and sensuous. I see and believe the lines. The poem is an intense experience; it doesn't merely tell me about something.
5) There's a difference between language that is utilitarian — merely for information — and language that tries to pack the maximum pleasure in words.
a) Utilitarian language is explosive, going outward, like a puff of smoke that evaporates and is gone (e.g. yesterday's newspaper, instructions that I'm grateful for when I start assembling a toy.)
b) Emotional language is implosive (e.g., fiction, poetry, powerful non-fiction prose, scriptures). Emotional language doubles in on itself, or implodes, for maximum pleasure — sounds, rhythms, images that conjure our deepest emotions. I'm compelled by emotional language that packs a power; at its best, language is striking, implosive.
Writing the emotional equivalent of feelings and ideas is a goal we probably can't ever reach; but intentionally to do less is too easy. Louis Simpson said the goal of poetry "is to make words disappear." Usually, we look through the glass of a window to see through the glass, not to focus on the spots or streaks. It would be easy to say "I'm awed by the majesty of the universe." But Whitman found an image to close his poem that says that, powerfully — without saying that — in "When I Heard the Learn'd Astronomer":

Till rising and gliding out I wander'd off by myself,
In the mystical moist night-air, and from time to time,
Looked up in perfect silence at the stars.

It's easy to say that the world's okay because God's in control; but ah! what power when Father Hopkins ends "God's Grandeur" with this bold image of faith:

And though the last lights off the black West went,
Oh, morning at the brown brink eastward, springs—
Because the Holy Ghost over the bent
World broods with warm breast and with ah! bright wings.

"Go in fear of abstractions," Ezra Pound urged us. Abstractions are lazy boys, addictive and boring, disguised as angels of wisdom. When Pound wrote, "Go in fear of abstractions," he said nothing new, laid down no new law, but spoke only the old advice, the obvious. No one I know says "Don't ever use abstractions," but simply "Go in fear of abstractions."
Most times, though, general statements and abstractions are your jailers. They are stiff-necked impostors on guard duty in your writing room. They are cynics, failures of the imagination; they envy your successes; they want you to fail. They hope writing won't delight you, that you won't discover exciting images and details that will delight your readers. They know Robert Frost was right: "No surprise in the writer, no surprise in the reader." Abstractions don't want you to move your readers. Abstractions are your captors, and they work without pay, because they hate poems. They hope you'll lose faith in yourself; they want you to quit writing, and let them sleep.
Resist abstractions, and they will flee from you. Writers that I admire believe Pound's warning about abstractions and try to write vividly. The best writers remember this, and they never ease up on themselves. They work always on basics, harder than when they began. They don't throttle back and cruise, but constantly push the envelope. Like Twain, they try to "find the right word, not its second cousin."

2. Vivid Images Are Keys to Freedom

I urge you to trust sensuous details to release you from the traps of easy clichés and vague and flabby writing. Defy the odds. Work hard, and believe in the powers of the imagination. Vivid specifics are keys to freedom. Muscle-up your poems with details that surprise you; they will surprise us, too. Trust good common-sense advice handed down by writers for generations. For example: Personal verse probably means a lot to two people. Share with us, through details, specific images. Don't merely tell us about something. Render us through an experience, with images, sounds, and rhythm, in tight, concise lines. Don't be vague or obscure; don't keep the experience hidden in your cupped hands.
Appeal to the senses; give specifics, details, for intensity. Open our eyes to the splendors of your imagination; delight us. A poem is not an ink blot. Therefore, go beyond first drafts; don't send off poems that read like general statements, whether rhymed or not. Try to spot in your own writing the clichés, the easy message. Learn well the difference in power between general statements and specific details, between weak abstractions that tell us and vivid images that shake up the senses. Accept the truism that it's harder — but more effective — to write lively images than to settle for general statements and abstractions.
Overcome the temptation to rationalize that readers should simply get out of poems whatever they want. That's too easy. Anyone can be vague; anyone can write ambiguous lines or stream-of-conscious catalogs. It's hard to be both interesting and clear. Writing is a hard craft to learn, but learn it you must, if you want to compete for good readers' time. If you grapple, and if you like this work, what you'll find will be exciting. The activity itself will reward you, the doing of it, the muscle tone you develop only by effort. "Ripeness is all," Shakespeare wrote. Work for the night is coming. Be active, ready for whatever you discover. I promise three words, if you work hard: "Delight in discovery."

3. The Elephants' Graveyard

Writers write. Your prayer should be, "Lead me not into temptation." As writers, we are modern Pilgrims, and our Progress will always be tested by temptations. For example:
Sloth: you'll be tempted not to write, knowing that you don't "have to."
Greed: that is, obsession to write, neglecting other duties and pleasures. Remember Brian Moore's novel An Answer from Limbo.
Envy: the perils are obvious.
Anger: that is, anger that others sometimes win "the awards, the jobs, the dollars," as Snodgrass said ("April Inventory"). Remember: Solomon said the race does not always go to the swift, and it's a matter of being in the right place at the right time. Work hard, so that if you're there at the right time and you win the Yale, what you publish won't embarrass you when you're old.
Flattery: compliments and strokes are wonderful. Flattery, though, is two puckered lips, and the ego is a balloon. Some flattery, of course, is two-faced, setting you up for a favor. But flattery also comes from well-meaning people who love you. I urge you, though: ignore all flattery; don't believe your press clippings. Some people need to give or to receive flattery like a fix; and it's true — flattery can be addictive. Read the history of tyrants and fools. Hug your friends who flatter you, but ignore completely what they say.
Another temptation for writers is plain old indulgence: that is, lowering your standards, your goals; being easy on yourself — winking at mediocre lines, thinking That's good enough. Pound urged us, "Go in fear of abstractions." My friends, I want you afraid of easy writing; I want you bold and hungry for the best you can do. I urge you to slam abstractions down, and stomp them; kick, stab them to death. Gouge out their eyes.
If they still crawl up your legs and bless you like the air you breathe, then maybe let them stay. Do the same violent rewriting to awkward line breaks, easy adverbs and neutral nouns; roll up your sleeves and pound a five-pound axe down into hardwood. Make it blaze. Hold your poem to the fire; burn away all chaff, all that isn't your poem. I know: that sounds too easy; but to do less seems easier. Those who attempt again and again what I'm urging you toward can come to amazing discoveries. Accept yourself, for you will often fail. If you love the thrill of it all, you'll try again.
Someone will ask you, "Do poems in forms have to pay as much attention to line breaks and powerful word choice as 'free-verse' poems do?" In other words, "What standards do you hold formal poems to — in terms of imagery, line breaks, compression, and intensity of language?"
If you're kind and reading for what I'm trying to offer, forgiving my weaknesses, you can guess my answer: I hold formal poems to the same high standards, the same impossible goals, in terms of rhythm; sounds; the compact incantatory power of language; vivid and appropriate imagery; clarity; and resonance. In other words, poetry. Again, to aim for less is too easy. A villanelle already presumes that what it repeats, in its narrow, limited range, is worthwhile. When it works — say, for Dylan Thomas or Theodore Roethke — what a massive power.
Every new sonnet promises it will daringly be worth our time, new wine in old wineskins. A long poem (whether meditative, narrative, or experimental, like "The Waste Land," "Howl," or "Middle Passage") — already presumes a great deal on a reader's time, attention span, and effort. When any poem works, the soul claps hands and sings — whether the poem is five or five hundred lines. If anything, a formal poem, or a long poem, should be more intense, better crafted, than a poem of ten irregular lines that don't rhyme.

What would you say to someone who justifies an awkward line break by protesting, "But this is a sonnet!" I think of Ezra Pound insisting that "A poem should be at least as well written as good prose." A sonnet should be at least as well written as good free verse. Likewise, meditation is no excuse for bad verse; a meditative poem should be at least as well written as a lyric.
How would you respond to someone who refuses to pay his taxes because he'sbuying a Rolex — or robs a convenience store or mugs a little old lady, and protests, "But I need the money for a parking meter" or to enter "the good-citizen contest"? There comes a time when the end doesn't justify the means. Beer in a mug or a thermos tastes flat if you cut it with water. Accountability: that's the key. Recall what Keats told Shelley: "Load every rift' . . . with ore."
"Spend it all," Annie Dillard advises writers. When you write, give yourself totally to a poem. Immerse yourself in the imaginative adventure. Don't sell cheap; don't hoard your energy. Spend it all. Creative writing is hard work; but it's fun enough, or you wouldn't do it. You sacrifice time, and you get back a handful of poems.
Be of good cheer; believe in the possibilities of the imagination. You'll be amazed by what you can make up or discover. Poetry is not autobiography, but art; not merely facts of your actual life, but invention; not confession, but creation — discovery of poems you wouldn't have found if you hadn't begun to write.
The dictionary defines a poem as "a made thing" (think of that: a made-up thing). If you rely only on facts that "really happened," you're limiting yourself, writing only with "the left brain." You might come up with a poem, but it's like trying to drill for oil with a cork screw, like trying to dig for gold with a plastic spoon, like searching for Noah's lost ark or the wreckage of Amelia Ehrhart's plane by reading essays about them.
Dare; take risks; let vivid and unexpected details flow. Be open, receptive to whatever comes to you in first drafts. Writing poems is invention, making up something as you go along, discoveries you probably wouldn't have thought of, if you carefully outlined or planned a poem. (But if that method works for you, bravo!) Usually, there's a surprising difference between writing accurately about facts and events that "really happened" vs. imaginative or creative writing. Believe in the possibilities of discovery, the rich and undiscovered oil fields and gold mines of the imagination — that reservoir of all you've ever experienced, heard about, or read, seen in movies, or glimpsed, all of it jumbled together and waiting to be found.
Down there — buried inside you — are regions you haven't touched for years or decades, or ever, except in hopes or dreams or nightmares. Those are the bits and remnants of all you've taken in — the lost cities of Atlantis, the elephants' graveyard, the forgotten playgrounds and bone yards of your life. Down there under the pressure and heat of living are the images you need for making poems — some of them already diamonds, most of them coal waiting to stoke your furnace — and gushers of oil that would drive your imagination's engine longer than you could write."

© by Walt McDonald

Here's a couple of his poems.

Two Poems, by Walter McDonald.

The Gifts Grandchildren Wrap

We sign and take the box from UPS,
brown paper our daughter wrapped
for her daughter, a yard-long gift

three inches thick. Inside, torn red-
and yellow paper stuck by Jillian
at odd angles, pieces stitched

like jigsaw puzzles jammed together
to make them fit, a Pollock painting.
My wife holds it on her lap and laughs,

picturing Jillian's toddler tongue
licking around, around to place the tape
just so, then shoving to stick it down

for Mamaw and Pop. Inside's a photo of her,
we've heard, framed for hanging.
We'll keep it with others, gladly,

for years--but now, for minutes, this taped
and tangled wrapping is the world,
sand painting we can't bear to shake.

Cougars Alone Near the Tundra

Cougars stay hidden even when they're home,
more wily than coyotes that lope along
after fawns, hoping to find one down
or hobbling. Coyotes stop and watch us
from the tundra, turn tail and trot.

Up past the aspen, cougars work alone.
Not social, like pick-and-shovel miners,
no need for teamwork, muscles and claws
bred to hunt. With cameras and backpacks,
we've aimed tripods at rocks all day.

Patient like them, we wait. Hot coffee cools,
and breakfast seems days ago. By noon,
we whisper, take turns with the telescope.
My wife leans down and checks the lens,
the focus. We've backtracked forty years,

remembering the birth of twins,
when each left home. Our scrapbook of talk
makes time go by, and makes it stop.
For decades, we've shot Montana moose
and grizzlies, a thousand rolls of film

we gave away--but not one mountain lion,
not one we're sure was cat and not a shadow.
Once they see us, they're gone. Today,
we found a rock slide near a cliff, a natural blind.
Tomorrow, while we still can climb, we'll try.

We swear before grandchildren are grown,
we'll snap one sunning herself on rocks
hot as bricks, yawning and arching her back
and blinking, or leaping uphill
with a rabbit dangling for her kits.

I look at his poems, and while they are good, to me they read like prose. There's nothing there for me for me to chew on, it's already been pureed into baby food for me.

The poem in question is already posted here on Neo - The Ascending One.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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I would love to, but I couldn't find any poems recently posted by the person who gave me the scathing review. Plus, most of the stuff I read before I got banned from the site was pretty boring to me. It's almost like they require you to have your soul sucked out to remain on the site.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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I like your analoge - I have just scanned over this but from the little I've read - thank goodness for Neo. I love you all!!!

Mand xxxxxxxx

Just going to pick up me grandchildren, I'll come back and read.

I know the place well, sounds like that "Gary" dude ...
they are ruthless, but they say it up front ... and the
"blurbs" definitely hold a double-arm load of information.
Their problem is they are ruthless, and many people only
last through one poem because it is blasted by one of the
moderators and everyone else is afraid to take on one of
those guys because it will lead to "the outside", almost any
questioning will lead to dismissal. People aren't allowed to
disagree, and for me, most of the poetry they would praise
was much the same generic shit, dull and flavorless. The
big problem with that site is that "it" probably represents the
publishing world very closely.


Their site does warn you, and I was prepared for my poem to get ripped apart. The response though, yeah, I'm not putting up with some pretentious arse treating me like I'm a complete idiot. I don't want their help that badly. :-D There are many other places I can go.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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I thank you ever so much for showing the *other side* of the *reality of publishing and critique*, Blue... I just hope this thread doesn't devolve into a commiseration of *poor Blue*....I know that's not your intention.


My intention is to develop an appreciation for Neo. This is a place where poets of all levels are welcomed. But at the same time as well, let's not lose sight of why we are here - to improve our poetry and grow as poets. Degrading people does not help them - constructive feedback does. But don't be so overly sensitive to feedback that you close yourself off to what someone else is pointing out - it helps to process the information being given to you, even if you don't use it. Also, keep in mind that person took precious time out of their day to comment on your poem, and give you some suggestions.

That's the only point I'm trying to make here! :-D

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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I couldn't remember if I had used this site before or not, so I looked it up and logged in:

You have been banned for the following reason:
No reason was specified.

Date the ban will be lifted: Never

Guess I had trouble there too!!



Workshops are now open:
With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

I guess we're all in like minded company. We're just a bunch of trouble makers! hahaha lol

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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No, no one really knows,
Any poetry
But they all,
Including me,
Consider having the genes,
Of an unknown

So I compose and say
Read, read,
Don’t read,
Don’t read
But I shall hence not plead,
So you may do like wise
Move on,
Be a passer by like me
Who knows fuck all of poetry?
Can you now see?
The difference
Between you and me


I think I've been to that site before. Same piece of sh**ty advice given to me. hehe


"Death smiles on us all. All a man can do is smile back." ~ Maximus Decimus Meridius

Maybe it's a purgatory for writers who *do cut their mustard* so to speak.

Can you imagine being *stuck* there?


I don't think I've had the "pleasure" of visiting that site. I did visit another one though. I posted maybe3-4 poems comment or reply. I read quite a few poems by others....most were mundane at best. When I did run across one that was pretty good, I suggested to the writer it could be improved by shortening a few of the lines.You would have thought I'd told the author his children were all ugly! At least here I get some feedback and don't have to fear sharing my ideas on peoples' poems.................scribbler


it is hard to believe that someone took offence to your critique. You are one of the most genuine and gentle guys I know...maybe his kids were ugly!

You can critique my work anytime, and my kids are gorgeous...just like their dad!



Workshops are now open:
With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

granting all has moved along at a sustainable progression...
I/we shall have neopoet to thank for growing just that bit better
and hopefully this shall have been a liberating and empowering exercise.

'write on! let these words free.'

there will be growing pains, there will be mistakes and there will still be only one poetry site on the web for people of all levels of poetic development and style to find what they need to learn- Neopoet.

Really hoping that some who have drifted away may return.

A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'

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