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YESTERDAYS DREAMS RIPPLING
I long to you belong
but it seems you don't want to belong
Married to speed at 16
now when one is oldie
you can only scream
Am I in my dream thinking
at the train speed at 19
Come forget those long since gone times
nothing for ever does for long chime
even gold leaves of autumn die
why then about ourselves lie
come by...
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2022-11-13 10:24
An interesting...
piece of shorthand that @! I'm not sure that I will ever utilize it, but interesting. I guess your message lies in the telling of one not to lie about lying? ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Sun, 2022-11-13 12:41
Yes Gee
@ implies ''at''
be happy
when first done
lol
Lavender
Sun, 2022-11-13 20:28
Yesterday's Dreams Rippling
Hi, Lovedly,
From your title, it feels like time is flowing, rippling away. Things we did in our youth sped by so fast and are now behind us. Better to see things for what they are now, and not kid ourselves. This is how this poem speaks to me.
Thank you!
Lav
lovedly
Mon, 2022-11-14 00:22
Lav
you sure have a vision but
here I read many poems
then spew my view
like fresh morning dew