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TIME, MEMORIES AND DREAMS

While sitting here I'm traveling
to both the future and the past
and do so without unraveling
the universe as it was cast.

Memories take me to my youth
or maybe just to yesterday
as surely as some magic booth
where quantum rules come into play.

Dream and hopes, they carry me
where tomorrow and years far from now
make me what I'll some day come to be.
(sometimes they let me down somehow)

I should have frequent flier miles
for all the trips my mind takes me.
Instead I get Sue's puzzled smiles
as she wonders where time's taken me.

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Trip back an forth Stan.

The line starting "to tomorrow..." I thought perhaps where tomorrow trips better on the tongue. Other than that, this is really an enjoyable read.

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Good idea! I'll change that right now. Appreciate the time you spent thinking about it.........stan

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This is absolutely gorgeous poetry .. I love the sentimental part of you, you can be wistful and poignant without being mushy ... love love love it

I've read some amazing work tonight this ones up there with them

love Sis xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Thank you. I'm gonna have to write something filled with even more mistakes than usual just to show I still can lol. Always good to see you've dropped by........stan

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