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Those Lovely Eyes
Those eyes my.... my
young and fresh
blushing young teen
16
are still so beautiful
looking at a voyeur in me
almost nearing 80
Age is not a factor
to factor in
it's only my bleak eye's
thin azure skin
I see her right shoulder
touching her ear
the other is like
Down Under
but she still is a dear
In the Atlantic ocean beach
I see her hair shining
flowing in the fastest wind
she desperately wants to hold 'em
but her beautiful face
is sparkling
may Neo-Poets permit me
to call her
O my baby Darling!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
This poem instills in one
there is no fear
to admire
What is age
but just a number
so don't yourself cage
as poets did earlier.
Editing stage:
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2020-03-15 07:57
I don't believe...
there has ever been a man or woman that has set an upper or lower limit to the age of beauty, just what you do about it.
I often see a girl of youth [teenager] and admire the beauty of her and I am in my seventies. Now, if I were to try and make something of it, I'm sure that I would be called a pervert and rightfully so. So, admire all you want. And don't use symbols for [at] ! ~Geezer.
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-03-15 09:03
So, admire all you want
ok GEE
AT @AXED
lovedly
Mon, 2020-03-16 02:15
great feelings
common for all women
so please your eyes
from a distance and smile only
slight casual wink may be
lol
lovedly
Wed, 2022-01-12 23:44
if u didn't read it
now you can
lovedly
Fri, 2022-01-14 14:05
Is it coz of snow
NEO poets have gone
SLOW
DO YOU ALL
KNOW