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Pretty Close to Perfect
Summer days I will remember
Summer nights I can’t forget
Your lips so sweet and tender
And your body…it was pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
Mmmm, so close
You took me by my hand
Led me like a little lamb
Showing me the secrets that you knew
And your love… ohhh…was pretty close to perfect.
Pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
Mmmm, so close.
And even then I knew
There would never be another girl like you
Just because.. you were pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
As close as any girl can get
Kisses, wine and love that’s true
Clouds, mountains, me and you
Messing just a little with my little boy mind
The promises in your smile were pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
Pretty close to perfect
God made you pretty close to perfect
Style / type:
Free verse
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Last few words:
Obviously, this is about young love. The girl can do no wrong. She is pretty close to perfect. He really is saying she is perfect. Just a simple, youngish verse about a young guy in love.
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Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2022-07-20 00:44
This could...
defintely be a song! Nice lyrics and chorus! Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Texas Jim Reyna
Wed, 2022-07-20 13:58
Thanks!
Then a song it shall be. I also write songs. If you don't mind, check me out: https://n1m.com/texasjimreyna
Thanks for the input!
author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2022-07-20 06:10
hello!
this is pretty close to being perfect, too!
as Geezer says, "welcome" glad to have you here!
always, Cat
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Texas Jim Reyna
Wed, 2022-07-20 13:59
Thank you.
Thanks for the kind comments. I'm glad I found this site!
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-07-20 06:21
I love this
I’m a sappy poems to my wife in her lunchbox guy. This is a sweet song that would have made me sad and nostalgic before I had the opportunity at falling in love with life and my wife all over again after some stagnant years listing at the helm.
Such a great one,
Tim
Texas Jim Reyna
Wed, 2022-07-20 14:07
Sappy is happy!
Hi, I don't know if anyone could be sappier than me. I'm glad you like this. It's not a song, yet, but could be. Check me out here, brother for songs I've written. https://n1m.com/texasjimreyna
Jim
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