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Overzealousness and assiduousness...
now propels yours truly towards restitution
courtesy sophisticated mountebank,
whose criminal mind
filched mine banknotes
rationed for when I exhibit decrepitude.
Cutthroat robber baron
re: newly minted vandal
an alumni matriculated
from school for scandal
a sheep in wolf's clothing
said culprit I call Randall
fleeced me such
more likely than not,
I will be forced to panhandle
and read book of Matthew
courtesy light of candle.
Mein kampf cloaked
with appurtenances of Medieval age
since money bags bereft
of mine lifetime earnings wage.
Bills come due without means to pay
not surprising angry feelings I display,
cuz he who whisked off with bounty
mutinous wordsmith of Schwenksville
yearns to hunt down and slay
thief who ran off with my loot
about eighteen plus days from yesterday
depending on whether I count back
from June twentieth, or twenty first
(before my troubles
seemed so far away)
and quite purposeless to pray
nor doth vindictiveness
appeal to me an aging baby
boomer pronouncing c'est la vie
another rhyme without reason oy vey.
I still smart even
long after hashtagging culprit
as misbegotten rat fink
snagged me as his quarry,
wherewithal of mine absent
nary a handy dandy blues clues
surrendering legal tender
without suspicion nor question
totally trusting typecast
mischievous loathsome devil.
Truth be told,
I take nine prescription medications
(for severe social anxiety,
mild depression, and palmar hyperhidrosis),
and often feel (dazed and confused)
in a heavily drugged stupor.
All sense and sensibility
went out the window
on what began
as an ordinary Tuesday without Morrie.
I already filed a police report
after being milked dry as a bone
for above mentioned funds
dirty deeds done dirt cheap
mean miscreants cached (>15 k),
which incident occurred
encompassing the dates
June 20th and 21st 2023,
whereby an Apple tech impersonator
scared the dickens out of me
by claiming Macbook Pro
replete with countless Trojan Horses,
computer viruses, malware, et cetera,
and mislead me to withdraw cash
out checking and savings accounts
then going to the nearest ATM
to convert cash
into bitcoin cyber currency
vis a vis courtesy creating
easy to pluck virtual pursestrings
thru My Wallet.com
said funds siphoned immediately
into the coffers of hucksters.
Elizabeth Clark,
a licensed practical nurse,
(who approves prescription medication
electronically scripted to
Skippack Pharmacy)
suggested I create a gofundme page,
which thus far witnessed
absolute zero donations.
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-07-10 06:03
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Geezer
Mon, 2023-07-10 00:37
At last...
I am learning how to read this type of work, and it is different
from the usual stuff I read. I must admit, that you have a good vocabulary and know how to use it.
I see the thread of emotion through this, and I know how you feel. I say, get it all out, sift it
through the seive of rage, and call me all kinds of fool.
Purge yourself with the flagellation of your self-confidence, and tearing of hair.
I like it, hope it did you some good! ~ Geezer.
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-07-10 06:12
dear Jane,
wow! I am astounded by your vocabulary prowess which is smooth as a baby/s bottom! as for the robber cad who drained you dry; may he/she be dipped in honey and tossed into a hungry bear's den in spring!
*love, Cat
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