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Olivia

The heavenly angels knew just what I wanted
a cherished bundle to be loved and flaunted
and when I saw you, I was filled up with love
such a perfect precious gift, sent from above

Just the sight of you brought a smile to my face
sweet dark eyes overflowing with angelic grace
not a single eyelash or brown hair out of place
too cute in your dresses made of satin and lace

Its not fair this tragic fate we were sadly dealt
all I ever prayed for was your happiness and health
I will never understand why God took you home
why me and your dad could not keep you for our own

But the Lord must have needed your special light
to shine in heaven above all, forever shining bright
every moment with you was as it was meant to be
and forever I will hold those memories close to me

Julie

D.D.

10/01/2010

In Memory of Olivia Louise Valenzuela, 5/18/2010-9/14/2010

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My best friend lost her 4 mnth old daughter to SIDS, its unexplainable and horrible. I didn't know what to say to her. Still don't. But what I do have is my poetry.

Comments

A very emotional, well written piece.

Love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

so sorry to hear of your friend's loss - there is nothing you can say - but just being there is the greatest help of all....

this poem flows easily and the slow rhythm brings a gentleness with the sadness
perfect title as it is a dedication.

love judy
xxxx

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