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Looking forward to 2012

As we approach the 2012 presidential campaign
Let’s remember our prayer’s to let freedom reign
So many that fought to take a stand in 2008
Paving our way with-in each and every state
We knew that sacrifices would have to be made
The previous administration left us feeling betrayed
The near future’s budgets having already been decided
Adversarial wall’s leaving the House and Senate divided
So change has most undoubtedly been hard to achieve
Only made possible by those who continue to believe
Believe that we deserve to live in the kind of world
That’s fair and proud of our republic’s flag unfurled
There are some that chose to blame Obama the man
Blaming everything and more on his “idealistic” plan
Forgetting we elected him for this very audacity
Seeing hope and potential alive and at full capacity
The ability to shake up a system made by lobbyist
Returning the power to an enlightened populace
So it’s an ongoing battle that has just barely begun
One we may wait along time to claim we have won
The establishment will surely fight us all along the way
But this is a struggle we shall all celebrate one day!

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
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I hope to avoid arguing politics. But I would love to hear about what you like or don't about the writing of the poem. Thanks.
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Comments

A rhyming free verse.......I kind of like that idea. It would read better if broken into stanzas in my opinion. And writing a political poem and hoping to avoid political arguments lol. Good luck with that! Good to see you back writing D.D..................stan

so you must be right!
Well done.

cheers,
Jess
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