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Od[ious][e] to Obscenity:

Submitted by OriginalRhyku on Thu, 2018-06-28 21:29

Is it not basic right to be obscene
Not a reversion to a cursing teen
And certainly not a foul mouth has-been
Rather a bleeping lean and mean machine

Need a damn Obscene Spelling Bee sorely
With no age limit for the constituents
That’s one hell of an idea surely
To enhance the profanity quotients

No need to be a monastic sourpuss
There is really nothing to discuss
Do not understand the self-righteous fuss
Just let go the inhibitions and cuss

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Comments

Feebie

Fri, 2018-06-29 01:55

Cuss Freely? :-)

Hi Rhyku,

This was an interesting read.

Especially loved this line - "No need to be a monastic sourpuss" - I know a few that would say otherwise in peak hour traffic around here LOL.

The freedom to swear like a trooper or so the saying goes - nice idea huh, certainly know a few individuals who think already applies to them and them only lol.

All in all - I loved the rhyme aspect in this piece - for me rhyme always makes or breaks the flow of reading and yours.......well you hit the nail on the head here.

Truly enjoyed this one.

thank you for sharing

Yours in Script

Feebie

Let life be your muse in all you do!!!

OriginalRhyku

Fri, 2018-06-29 17:43