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My Words
At my worst, I am my biggest enemy.
Crippled by old wounds, misguided daggers spewing from my mouth.
Their only desire is to cut through the tranquility of my surroundings, ensuring the sudden jolt of a slammed door and a heated dispute.
If I tape my mouth will these thoughtless ramblings be silenced?
What does it take for me to see past the core ramblings of my words into the hurt that it hurls at others, plastering a look of disappointment across their faces?
My ramblings are a reflection of what I protect myself from.
Saying what I think it is before it happens must create an imaginary barrier between me and the non-existent issue that I have created because I don't want it to exist.
A whirling tornado of complexity dismantles my peace.
Why is it so difficult to keep my mind silent and free from the lies I tell myself?
The past has a cruel way of leaving memories of itself behind me as I walk along like breadcrumbs in a fairytale.
Making it almost impossible to forget such moments where I lost the best in me.
Moments where I caused distress to prevent an occurrence that would have otherwise remained buried.
My words are either satin like a rose or sharp like the thorn upon its stem.
My only true intentions are to protect and preserve the peace, however, at what cost?
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-11-04 07:30
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
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Teresa Marie
Sat, 2023-11-04 12:52
What do you mean?
What do you mean?
author commentClentin
Mon, 2023-11-06 12:57
What does” it is not feasible
What does” it is not feasible to offer feedback” mean?
Geezer
Sat, 2023-11-18 00:26
It means...
that the AI needs to rest, from having an emotional overload, and subsequent breakdown.
We must recalibrate.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-11-04 16:05
An honest write
I feel like you really bared a good portion of your soul in this poem. Many of us use our words as a defense mechanism even though we subconsciously know it may not be the best course of action, we act impulsively or against a perceived threat the best way we know how. The format of the poem could be tightened up a bit perhaps by creating stanzas. Otherwise well done!
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Sat, 2023-11-18 00:23
Yeah...
what she said! I felt the pain and trying to disconnect from the toxic person that you feel you have become.
I too, like the idea of stanzas. I think it will give it room for each part of the write. Condense these lines to express each idea
in four lines. You have a wealth of imagination, let's see what you can do with it. ~ Geezer.
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