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Motorhome
My high school friend,
the only one I’m still in touch with,
has been drifting from town to town
in states with very few people,
but overfilled with stark beauty
He’s been doing this for many years
in his shelter with wheels
He was just outside of Belle Fourche,
or maybe it was Medicine Bow,
when I last heard from him
I’ve never asked him
what he could possibly be looking for
out there on the backroads of the West
It doesn’t seem like the kind of question
you should ask in a text or a phone call,
but I like to think it’s the wandering
that he has found.
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Lavender
Tue, 2023-01-10 19:19
Motorhome
Hello, Michael,
Love the small details that add character and charm to this. Looked up the sites you mention - stunning. This is such a nice picture of the lifestyle of your friend. Seems wherever he goes, he is homeward-bound.
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-01-15 10:36
Thanls L! I have been evvious
Thanls L! I have been evvious of my friends lifestyle. He seems happy to this day.
Best
Michael Anthony
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2023-01-11 07:03
Stark beauty
The ambiguities here are just the right stuff. I don’t even wanna ruin this moment by typing. We are all wanderers I think.
Tim
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-01-15 10:37
We are all wanderers to be
We are all wanderers to be sure - thanks Tim!
Best
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Wed, 2023-01-11 07:43
dear Michael,
I love your mind, which is always questing and hungry. may you always find beauty in your details!
I was a wanderer much of my life, then I met Steven. now we wander together...
*hugs, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-01-15 10:38
Hi cat! I have found my
Hi cat! I have found my wandering companion as well. We are lucky souls.
Best
Michael Anthony
Geezer
Wed, 2023-01-11 11:00
Excellent observations...
I'm not sure of how to classify this one, and not sure that I should try. It is just the simple thoughts of an old high school friend and what is he doing out there? What is he looking for, and hoping that he has found it. Nice stuff!
~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-01-15 10:38
Always appreciate your visits
Always appreciate your visits Geez - thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony