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Great Longing

Submitted by lovedly on Wed, 2022-03-23 21:50

There's a great longing
to return back to the days
ere
when you were amidst us
now no more
yet

We shall continue to remember you
yeah you bet
time and tide never waited
for anyone as yet

So we too will be on a similar boat
you bet
but hopefully
not really as yet

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
REMEMBRANCE HAS A LONG ENDING
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-03-24 07:28

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is this poem about Jess T. I miss him terribly. he was a good teacher and a very good friend. not too many people/poets understood him and his ways. I'm glad that you did.

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-03-24 07:29

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great poem!

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-03-24 12:39

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Glad you liked it This was a continuation of my latest loss Thanks it could apply to jess or any of Neos we all know Thanks

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-03-24 14:02

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do you remember the Moonman? I always liked his poetry, too.

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-03-24 16:10

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but didn't like my poetry
as much as
IAN ESKER AND JUDY
STILL WE can pray for them
As our own eyes dim we can no longer play in whim the stars forever stay bright whether we normal human in this mundane world stay left or right only our memories should for ever be bright like the twilight ere last night remember all bedded deep we might

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2022-03-25 08:11

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very well said, almost like a poem, very poetic!

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-03-25 10:12

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I can see where it could be about any of us. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Fri, 2022-03-25 11:56

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IN good books we must be like ROSES

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funmzy Artz

Sat, 2022-03-26 04:26

I love the tone of this poem. Also referring me to a moment in the past.

@funmzy

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