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Dawn Hangs Low When Mist Abides

Submitted by Kailashana2 on Mon, 2024-05-06 10:37

The walls have tears
when footsteps fall
in sorrowful ears.

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Editing - rough draft

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Not Explicit Content

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neopoet

Mon, 2024-05-06 16:40

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dawn Hangs Low When Mist Abides" presents a somber and reflective tone through its concise imagery. The use of personification in "The walls have tears" evokes a sense of sadness and vulnerability, while the line "when footsteps fall" adds a layer of melancholy and heaviness to the atmosphere. The phrase "in sorrowful ears" further emphasizes the emotional weight of the scene. To enhance the impact of the poem, consider expanding on the imagery and exploring different ways to convey the theme of sorrow and loss. Additionally, experimenting with the structure and rhythm of the poem could help create a more dynamic and engaging flow.

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Kailashana2

Tue, 2024-05-07 05:25

This is a Haikuesque poem.

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Kailashana2

Tue, 2024-05-07 05:25

This is a Haikuesque poem.

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Geezer

Mon, 2024-05-06 11:16

Welcome back...

old friend. I get your new perspective. Glad to see you. ~ Geez.
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Kailashana2

Mon, 2024-05-06 13:03