Darling, will you come dancing,
Dance with me, this night?
And underneath the moon and stars,
We’ll give that mouse a fright:
“I’ve never seen such love before”
He’ll be sure,
to remark.
We’ll fox-trot among the lillies
I’ll whisper you sweet words.
Our feet shall stir the sleeping worms,
Who in turn shall wake the birds.
And they will sing to match our movements,
As we twirl:
round and round.
And a chorus shall rise among
all the crannies of the flora
We dance and sing and love and laugh
Your very beauty like an aura.
And on and on, throughout the dark
Till cloud first kissed with sun.
Now stopped, your eyes will find mine,
and I shall brush back the hair
from your face and will think:
This night, my love has come to bear.
Darling will you come dancing,
Dance with me, for life?
last stanza
only a suggestion how do you feel about
changing it just ever so slightly
Now stopped your eyes will FIND mine
and I shall brush(BACK) your hair from your face and think
etc etc
this poem is very well written up to the last stanza which could use just a bit of tweaking
Chrys
Thanks Chrys, I decided to
Thanks Chrys, I decided to take those things on board and add them in. Thanks muchly!
Kieran
“Mind, how you go!”
- Roger McGough’s poem for LSD Awareness Week