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Docmaverick
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Submitted by docmaverick on 13 September 2007 - 4:12am.
Style / Type:
Western Classic
I thought of you last night
how the stars twinkled when you smile,
how even though you’re all grown up
you’ve never lost your inner child;
how even though times have been hard
your sense of humor has prevailed,
and even when against all odds
your private outlook’s never failed.
I wish that I could be like you
to spark in others, inner light
you’re the sunshine in our days
and the beacon in our nights.
I felt your presence the other day
through all the problems and the strife,
and thought, how lucky I am to know
someone who adds so much to life.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I smile at the sentiment
there are just a few people I know who make the world a better place just by existing.
But man, I don’t want to get boring on this, but it does come across a bit Hallmarky, sorry
cheers,
Jess
i thought of you
Sorry I have to disagree…it’s not Hall markee to me..it is sincere thoughts from a clear mind..it’s nice to have those kinds of thoughts…we all need a few more of them…
i thought of you
Sorry I have to disagree…it’s not Hall markee to me..it is sincere thoughts from a clear mind..it’s nice to have those kinds of thoughts…we all need a few more of them…