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I Regret I Fear and Regret Revisited
I Regret I Fear - part one
I regret, I fear, that you were ever here
Love so intense, I feel too much to my chagrin
not better to be in love and lose
better to have that love at any cost
languishing in desolation
wish I could keep you at arms length
you envelop my heart
supine in my grief I repent at the alter of my emotions
wracked with regret I’ve let this wound fester
repair the chasm, let the lesion coagulate
irrevocably in love , still resolute
at the risk of plagiarising Piaf
no I do not regret
I fear I do not regret
Regret Revisited - part two
Regret , I fear, has turned into acceptence
Love so intense, now glad you were here.
Wish with all my heart, I hadn’t lost you.
I Bask in sweet memories of the past
Still long to be with you.
But I’ve come to the conclusion,
I’ll never have you.
Sometimes the pain feels like it has gone,
But love lingers on.
irrevocably in love , still resolute
Fuck I’m not over you.
Comments
lou
Sat, 2011-02-05 07:53
Ian
Thanks
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Sat, 2011-02-05 08:32
Another poem worthy of
Another poem worthy of critique, but I'm afraid I have none.
~A
lou
Sat, 2011-02-05 10:02
anna
thanks
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
themoonman
Sat, 2011-02-05 10:41
Hi Lou ...
Remove some of the pronouns and I think
it would improve this greatly.
"you will always be the one" ... unneeded and trite
just one man's opinions.
thanks for posting
lou
Sun, 2011-02-06 00:35
Richard
I take your point
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Nordic cloud
Mon, 2011-02-07 01:46
A sad little story that many
A sad little story that many experience
at least once in their lives,
and which linger on a long time
if many of the circumstances fitted
while it lasted;
you put it plain and simple here Lou,
and we are drawn to sympathise with it.
Love Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
lou
Wed, 2011-02-09 16:20
thanks
thanks ann
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Wed, 2011-02-09 16:21
xena
thanks for reading
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Candlewitch
Wed, 2011-02-09 11:48
Dear Lou,
I'm with Rosi on this one... LOVED that last line! It is so you! Nothing so frustrating as the last strains of music gone by. I have no suggestions.
love, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lou
Wed, 2011-02-09 16:23
Cat
am i really that bad ?
lol
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Race_9togo
Wed, 2011-02-09 21:00
Hi Lou
I like this very much, its very desparate and bitter, to me.
This line
"Sometimes the pain feels like it has all but gone,"
breaks the flow big time, for me.
"Sometimes the pain has all but gone", perhaps?
Or something like that.
Good stuff.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
lou
Thu, 2011-02-10 00:22
Jim
Thank you this needs work. It's the second in a series of poems, the first being I Regret I Fear. The the third will be Complicated.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Race_9togo
Thu, 2011-02-10 00:32
Lou,
I cannot find the 1st one, did you change the name?
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
lou
Thu, 2011-02-10 04:54
Jim
it was on old neo, ill re-post it
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!