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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-07 17:29
Hi Everybody "Eternal Renga" continues now
Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
Great haiku bosslady Love it.
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Seren
Sat, 2012-11-10 01:40
Dear Barbara
I was looking to join the workshop which thread do I post my verses this thread or the other one ? lol got a bit confused lol ...
hugs JC xxx
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-11-10 11:43
Thanks JC
Thanks For joining. Post verses to this one. The other is closed. I'll add you to the workshop now.
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Seren
Tue, 2012-11-13 08:12
Renga poetry
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
and forever comes the drift
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-13 07:46
This is good
Check the last line. It seems to have 6 syllables rather than seven.
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Seren
Wed, 2012-11-14 07:28
Thanks Barbara I think I have
Thanks Barbara I think I have fixed the problem, hopefully I got it right this time lol
hugs JC x
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-14 09:09
Thanks JC
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
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BlueDemon77
Sun, 2012-11-11 19:10
Renga 4
Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts (monumented?)
forever come(s?) the drifts
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of ALL
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Seren
Tue, 2012-11-13 03:54
Hey Ron
muniment has its own definition in the blackies standard shilling dictionary
means to - support, defence, a character, a writing by which claims and right are defended
forever come(s?) the drifts - yes you picked it up I didnt notice it, it should be 'forever comes the drift'
hope i helped with the definition of muniment
sincerely Jayne-Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
BlueDemon77
Tue, 2012-11-13 21:16
Ok, Jane-Chloe
I wasn't aware of muniment. Thanks for the definition and sorry for the misunderstanding.
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Seren
Tue, 2012-11-13 22:05
Ron
I have quite a collection of dictionary's, and every now and then I see a new word I love finding something obscure that most people wouldnt have heard of before ...glad I could help
regards Jayne=Chloe(JC)
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Tue, 2012-11-13 11:55
Love the vision of snow
A new days substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-13 09:55
I love the snow too and its purity
Nice 4 additions
Substance's new day. Has 4 syllables
Smoothed pure scene, of life’s dream. Has 6 syllables
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
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Ian.T
Tue, 2012-11-13 09:27
Barbara
My syllable checker gave me 7 for that line but just in case:-
Smooth|ed pure scene, of life’s dream
or if Smoothed is only one syllable then just put THE in:-
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-13 10:04
Okay
Let me check something
Okay I checked
I went by this dictionary, but its not the only one I recommend.
http://www.thefreedictionary.com/Smoothed
Also check this one. Substance's new day. Has 4 syllables
Thanks hope all is well where you are.
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Ian.T
Tue, 2012-11-13 11:52
Barbara
I am not to sure of the "Sub|stan|ce's new day" only having four syllables.
I always run these lines past a syllable checker but it seems to be at fault unless it is another thing like US or UK English I will check when time permits.
So let me sort that line out all I can do is say "A new days substance"
This is showing me 5 syllables so we can use that it says the same..
Thanks for your patience, Yours, Ian
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-13 13:51
All is good
Thanks for your willingness. Happy everybody is enjoying the workshop.
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Ian.T
Tue, 2012-11-13 11:58
Renga 4
Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts (monumented?)
forever come(s?) the drifts
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of ALL
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new days substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-13 14:00
Thanks Ian
Thanks for posting new renga
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Ian.T
Wed, 2012-11-14 03:46
Barbara
That's fine we just need:- munimented in our hearts (monumented?) line sorting by Ron then we can complete that part.
Are you going for the standard 35 stanzas in a Renga or are we just stopping when it feels OK ???.
Hope you have a lovely day out there, the dawn will be creeping soon and you will have to face another day La La. Hope it's a good one.
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-14 09:43
Hey Ian
We were doing 20. we can start doing 35 verses. Right now renga 4 is at 15 verses
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-14 09:43
Hey Ian
We were doing 20. we can start doing 35 verses. Right now renga 4 is at 15 verses
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-14 10:37
New renga 4
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-14 12:38
Hey everybody
I'm be offline for a week on vacation. I'm leaving Friday night for a 8 day Caribbean cruise. If I can pick up a cafe wifi on one of the islands I may check in. If not, have fun writing neopoet renga 4 until I return.
Ian I would appreciate it if you would moderate while I gone. Just let the renga 4 continue until I return. I will pick up from where I left off and add the new verses to my draft copy, check, revise, and post to stream and start renga 5.
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Ian.T
Wed, 2012-11-14 15:41
Barbara
You just go and have fun and stop worrying about a Renga, you go have a Rumba or two and a drink of spiced rum for me, the white rum that is.
My thoughts will go with you, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-14 19:33
Thanks Ian
Okay I'll have a spiced rum just for you.
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Ian.T
Fri, 2012-11-23 17:05
Hello twice
Anyone out there???
We need some writing to appear on this page....
Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
bossladyone
Mon, 2012-11-26 06:38
Ok Ian. T
and new beginnings
are new dreamer's visions created
what we ourself hoped
Maybe this will work
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-11-26 10:01
Hi boss lady
Like it
Your stanza are fresh and exciting, It flow really fine with the preceding verse.
Only one thing, check your 2nd line
and new beginnings
are new dreamer's visions created < has 9 syllables > < only need 7 >
what our selves hoped
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-11-26 10:05
Hi Mark
Yea I automatically link everybody from the last workshop.
Glad t see you here.
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Ian.T
Mon, 2012-11-26 08:52
Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
,
and new beginnings
are new dreamer's visions created
what our selves hoped
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Ian.T
Mon, 2012-11-26 08:56
Renga 4
Some of the submitted pieces will need their syllable counts sorted but that can be done later with permission of the author's, Yours Ian.T
PS:- the three liners should be 5-7-5 syllables give or take
the two liners should be 7-7 the Renga should go on to 35 stanzas.
We shall see what Barbara decides as the originator has control.
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-11-26 09:50
Hi everybody I'm back
I missed Neopoet ESP Renga while I was vacationing on the Carnival FunShip. You did great Ian It's as you said. I'm waiting to see the verses come in.
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Seren
Mon, 2012-11-26 09:06
Wow some great work here ...
Wow some great work here ... do you want me to add anymore verses or do we just add once ???
love JC xxx
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Ian.T
Mon, 2012-11-26 09:22
Jayne
You can send as many stanzas as you wish, just add them to the growing theme, Barbara will be back later.
We then just put the whole thing onto the stream as a completed item, this one has a few stanzas to go yet,
Thank you for your support,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Mon, 2012-11-26 09:25
Ian
No worries I have a couple of ideas I will play round with tonight its only 1.30am I will be up for a while yet its still so hot ... blah !! smiles
love JC xxx
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-11-26 10:07
Hi JC
Looking forward to seeing them.
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Seren
Mon, 2012-11-26 09:52
hey Mark
I was just working on a couple of verses gonna have to go back to the drawing board hahaha hope your well
regards JC x
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Seren
Mon, 2012-11-26 11:16
The quick and the dead lol
The quick and the dead lol its alright I will redo mine tomorrow
Good to see you hope your well !!
JC x
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-11-26 10:10
Hi Mak
Great two liner. Works perfectly.
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bossladyone
Mon, 2012-11-26 17:24
Hi Babara
I am sorry I put on verse count and it says 5,7,5 , but the words are new in the 2nd line do not need to be there.
and new beginnings
dreamer's visions created
what our selves hoped
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-11-26 20:09
Thanks boss lady
Great!!! just one syllable off in last line
what our selves hoped (maybe > hope for >
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bossladyone
Mon, 2012-11-26 23:05
Barbara
That sounds good to me. Go for it. This poem is really special. It has a lot of meaning in the words
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-27 12:18
Okay great
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
and new beginnings
dreamer's visions created
what our selves hope for
wander onto vision's edge
look at clouds from both sides now
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-11-27 12:19
Yea
Glad you feel that way
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-12-01 00:24
Hi everybody
I'm not as active at PoetrySoup as i am here, Being a member they sent this software tool to my email to try out and give feedback. I used it and like it a lot. It is a wonder software "Haiku Counter" tool. I give it all fives. Here's a link.
http://www.poetrysoup.com/haiku_syllable_counter/
I thought it would be great for this workshop since counting syllables is a major factor. It takes the work out of counting syllable for Renga Poetry. Hehe
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Ian.T
Sat, 2012-12-01 04:00
Not my Addy just for you to Addy
I give you a rose
To hold my love truthfully
Also for your Loves
Take it hold the perfect dream
Stay true to all those around
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Sat, 2012-12-01 04:24
Ian
I like those lines I will try and write something to follow I started one the other night and didnt get it finished will try my hand at one :)
love JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Sat, 2012-12-01 04:35
Jayne
use that link that Barbara has given us, I had another two that counted syllables and they save so much time it took me about ten minutes to write those lines I put up.
You have a lovely evening out there, I hope it is cooler today,
Yours as always Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Sat, 2012-12-01 04:49
Sorry to say today was
Sorry to say today was stinking hot, worst day I can remember for a long time, the suns set and its still 32 degrees I am hoping that it cools down somewhat before bed we didnt get much sleep the last two nights its been shocking we are praying for rain or even a storm its just so damn hot
my Pa would call it an ass scorcher lol
love always Jayne-Chloe x
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-12-01 23:25
Ian
;-)
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-12-01 23:23
Wonderful Ian
I like those lines.
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-12-01 23:23
Wonderful Ian
I like those lines.
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Ian.T
Sun, 2012-12-02 03:10
Barbara
I give to you the rose of truth and the rose of trust in those that are close to you.
Is it a little poss to have some of this duplication on some of my poems it will increase the number of comments LOL.
You have a lovely day out there, Yours as always, Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-12-02 03:13
Ian
Lol
:-)
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-12-03 02:16
Hi Mark
Yea syllable counter will work for those having it harder that us counting syllable. It not always accurate but it take most of the work out of counting. But not better than counting yourself.
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
and new beginnings
dreamer's visions created
what our selves hope for
wander onto vision's edge
look at clouds from both sides now
I give you a rose
To hold my love truthfully
Also for your Loves
Take it hold the perfect dream
Stay true to all those around
Summer down under
Rainstorms are out of season
Here in New England
Nicely done
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-12-03 16:47
Lol
Silly me
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Ian.T
Mon, 2012-12-03 18:38
LOL
England waits, the flood subsides
Wonder where it has all gone?
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-12-03 20:44
Ian
Wonderful addition
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
and new beginnings
dreamer's visions created
what our selves hope for
wander onto vision's edge
look at clouds from both sides now
I give you a rose
To hold my love truthfully
Also for your Loves
Take it hold the perfect dream
Stay true to all those around
Summer down under
Rainstorms are out of season
Here in New England
England waits, the flood subsides
Wonder where it has all gone
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-12-03 22:20
Fun it is lol
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
and new beginnings
dreamer's visions created
what our selves hope for
wander onto vision's edge
look at clouds from both sides now
I give you a rose
To hold my love truthfully
Also for your Loves
Take it hold the perfect dream
Stay true to all those around
Summer down under
Rainstorms are out of season
Here in New England
England waits, the flood subsides
Wonder where it has all gone?
England flushed it south
That chanel rose, lost compose
France has wet it's pants
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-12-16 21:23
hi New Renga
Neopoet Renga 4
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
One nation many faces
Come together under God
snow circles windows
a painting of dawn relief
night comes in quarters
munimented in our hearts
And forever comes the drift
scrawled on windowsills
nails scratch crystalline etchings
from our loved ones' past
the words cryptic to the mind
fluent in love's shared language
nature holds our loved
in memories and yet more
spirit parts of all
covered by soft drifting snow
purity coats our landscape
A new day substance
Smoothed the pure scene, of life’s dream
I am clean, yes clean
can we just keep the pure snow?
Life would be a gentle flow..
Only tears of joy
Life pure as the driven snow
No more afflictions
Chaste love kindness compassion
Sunshine forever faces
and new beginnings
dreamer's visions created
what our selves hope for
wander onto vision's edge
look at clouds from both sides now
I give you a rose
To hold my love truthfully
Also for your Loves
Take it hold the perfect dream
Stay true to all those around
Summer down under
Rainstorms are out of season
Here in New England
England waits, the flood subsides
Wonder where it has all gone?
England flushed it south
That chanel rose, lost compose
France has wet it's pants
Englanders sought roof's refuge
first responders propel boats
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Ian.T
Mon, 2012-12-17 19:00
Barbara
I am resting a while, yet the last four stanzas would be better to start another Renga as they have wandered away.
This would give others to bring in their seasonal problems as Hurricane's and ill winds blow.
USA, Aussie, England all have been flooded, so this next with those four stanzas can reflect one place at a time and we can go world wide ????
Yours Ian.T
Patterns of destruction
Summer down under
Rainstorms are out of season
Here in New England
England waits, the flood subsides
Wonder where it has all gone?
England flushed it south
The channel rose, lost compose
France has wet it's pants
Englanders sought roof's refuge
first responders propel boats..
Maybe we should research Noah..
,
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-12-18 02:54
I agree Ian
i will finalize this one. eternal renga will always be here for any who is interested. i start a forth whenever some one want to come with group with a theme of their own.
so, just leave a idea in comment section. ill be checking in from time to time .
remember renga can be group of three or more writing a renga all of their own. its up to you. I'm working on other renga projects now. but is alway here..
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-12-18 05:48
Hi Mark
I'm relaxing a bit too and agree with Ian also on maybe a group from each country could write their own renga pertains to their area of the worlds. They'd all be Neopoet renga with a group theme such as "Neopoet Renga Aussie " or "Neopoet Renga USA" etc. I've been Meditating on these new ideas for eternal renga I think some may like. the basic is intact but a different way to run. I creating something similar on my wordpress blogs that still in poetry. but I am always here just a comment away lol
Any ideas guys
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-12-25 23:49
sounds good Mark
lets see who adds to its theme
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-12-25 23:49
sounds good Mark
lets see who adds to its theme
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Ian.T
Wed, 2012-12-26 03:27
Hi New years Weather
Her wrath and beauty
the storms and sunsets collide
meanwhile fair weather
Fear the power of changes
Know I can call you to me
Call me natural
Wait my imminent fury
Land sea and airborne
Probably the last of my Renga bits for this year, Have a great new year all of you, Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-12-26 12:30
Great Ian
this is great stuff here it flows perfectly
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2013-01-08 10:09
New Renga
Neopoet Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
Our forefathers origin
Tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
New race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
Appear from the aftermath
The red white and blue
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sueb
Tue, 2013-01-08 10:23
Irishman no stress
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2013-01-08 10:44
sueb
make a two liner. you can still add this one after it if you want. You are doing great to say you didn't know what a renga was. What so fun about this workshop you get to experience four types of poetry here. Haiku, Senyru, and Tanka = Renga
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2013-01-25 22:23
Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
Our forefathers origin
Tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
New race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
Appear from the aftermath
The red white and blue
(two liner anybody)
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
(two liner anybody)
That all nations die
Not knowing our present
Stops all the worry
That we know of their past ways
Endeavour to correct wrongs
thanks Ian works perfectly
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bossladyone
Mon, 2013-02-04 15:33
I think it will fit
Two sovereign one God
Appear from the aftermath
The red white and blue
Blood stained forever now
but new ideals bring change
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2013-02-04 19:11
Boss
great it does fit
thanks for the two liner
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2013-02-04 19:16
New Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
Our forefathers origin
Tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
New race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
Appear from the aftermath
The red white and blue
Neopoet Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
our forefathers origin
tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
new race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
appear from the aftermath
the red white and blue
Blood stained forever now
but new ideals bring change
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
(two liner anybody)
That all nations die
Not knowing our present
Stops all the worry
That we know of their past ways
Endeavour to correct wrongs
thanks Ian works perfectly
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Ian.T
Tue, 2013-02-05 02:56
Barbara
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
Guinness slow to settle down
Waits to quell the thirst of man
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2013-02-05 23:51
Ian
Sounds good
Neopoet Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
our forefathers origin
tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
new race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
appear from the aftermath
the red white and blue
Blood stained forever now
but new ideals bring change
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
Guinness slow to settle down
Waits to quell the thirst of man
That all nations die
Not knowing our present
Stops all the worry
That we know of their past ways
Endeavor to correct wrongs
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bossladyone
Sun, 2013-02-17 15:14
Barbara
awake to a day
of new trials and triumphs
this generation
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2013-02-17 20:39
Bosslady
Thanks for posting
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2013-02-17 20:40
Bosslady
Thanks for posting
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2013-03-19 08:26
Hi mark
Sorry to be on late. got so much happening. Nice one. Addition after the boss. Okay I'm at hospital wit my mom be on it in couple days. Then I'll add you thanks for the addition.
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BlueDemon77
Tue, 2013-03-19 10:15
Renga 5 cont.
Neopoet Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
our forefathers origin
tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
new race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
appear from the aftermath
the red white and blue
Blood stained forever now
but new ideals bring change
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
Guinness slow to settle down
Waits to quell the thirst of man
That all nations die
Not knowing our present
Stops all the worry
That we know of their past ways
Endeavor to correct wrongs
The Criminals take
altered apprentices now
not gripped by ethics
only the thrill of the take
and the lifetime of training
The good push and pull
fighting 'til the last one falls
evil is not alone
a boxer stands in the way
he'll die before he gives ground
For in the flux of evil
men have risen to fight it
the world's nature true
is the contest being fought
much as it has always been
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Sat, 2013-03-23 22:39
Thanks Ron great finish
I'll add mark to the finality.
Thanks everybody
Neopoet Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
our forefathers origin
tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
new race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
appear from the aftermath
the red white and blue
Blood stained forever now
but new ideals bring change
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
Guinness slow to settle down
Waits to quell the thirst of man
That all nations die
Not knowing our present
Stops all the worry
That we know of their past ways
Endeavor to correct wrongs
The Criminals take
altered apprentices now
not gripped by ethics
Only the thrill of the take
and the lifetime of training
The good push and pull
fighting 'til the last one falls
evil is not alone
A boxer stands in the way
he'll die before he gives ground
For in the flux of evil
men have risen to fight it
the world's nature true
Is the contest being fought
much as it has always been
Figures standing in darkness
Breed thorns and nettle
Amid promises and hope
Nostalgia the flower child
"The Family" brought an end
It's still available for a while longer for any who want to pop in, share a stanza or stanzas at your convenient.
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2013-05-12 00:44
Neopoet Renga 5
Neopoet Renga 5
Ethnics soon sunder
our forefathers origin
tumult from terra
Gods fight for control north, south
new race emerge to power
Two sovereign one God
appear from the aftermath
the red white and blue
Blood stained forever now
but new ideals bring change
Irishman no stress
it's always dry in the pub
amused by panic
Guinness slow to settle down
Waits to quell the thirst of man
That all nations die
Not knowing our present
Stops all the worry
That we know of their past ways
Endeavor to correct wrongs
The Criminals take
altered apprentices now
not gripped by ethics
Only the thrill of the take
and the lifetime of training
The good push and pull
fighting 'til the last one falls
evil is not alone
A boxer stands in the way
he'll die before he gives ground
For in the flux of evil
men have risen to fight it
the world's nature true
Is the contest being fought
much as it has always been
Figures standing in darkness
Breed thorns and nettle
Amid promises and hope
Nostalgia the flower child
"The Family" brought an end
This world runs on greed
Black suited men know their name
No world left No gain
Grant us the reason to win
A new world for our children
_________________________
Ian you were in an old workshop on the stream that been closed. But it okay. See what you can do with it here. It's a good one I like it. Once you're done I'll close this Renga 5 and start a new renga workshop soon. My mind already coming up with a title. It'll be different, but nothing you haven't already done here many times. Hope everyone in this workshop joins. It's gonna be fun. I'll do my best to make it so. Jess has a brilliant idea and I'm looking forward to it working with him and to learn from all the participants as it's not a strong poetic area for me.
The waters subside once more
How many times to endure
We move on stronger
Helping out our friends again
It's always our way
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Ian.T
Tue, 2013-05-07 03:22
Barbara
Lets close the number off:-
This world runs on greed
Black suited men know their name
No world left No gain
Grant us the reason to win
A new world for our children
Take care look forward to the next one, Yours Ian.T
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