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Beginnings...
One final satisfying push!
Labor, gratifyingly over...
"It's a beautiful boy"
Nurse says in a smiling voice.
(pain no longer matters)
Gently placing him into
hungry waiting arms.
Healthy!
He is pink and perfect
unconditional love,
both mutual and enduring.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rula
Sat, 2022-12-31 14:45
Cat!
Simply stunning!
A winner entry even if it doesn't win
I love it beginning with the title till the last word.
Thank you for sharing dear.
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-01 15:34
dear Rula,
thank you for being so positive. but I know it won't win, as it isn't in the cards and someone upstairs has it in for me, lol.
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Lavender
Sat, 2022-12-31 15:03
Beginnings
Hello, Cat,
What a tender, loving poem. Beautiful title!
L
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-01-16 17:27
*Smiles :)
thank you, dearest lavender!
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Geezer
Sat, 2022-12-31 16:18
Remembering...
justifying the pain of childbirth, and the joy of motherhood! I've been in the delivery-room and watched. It was a life changing experience. The beginning...Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-01-16 17:29
thank you, Geezer,
sorry i am so late!
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2022-12-31 17:19
Close to home
My lovely and kind wife is a super hero nurse in the local labor and delivery unit. I assure you she lives for these moments and they pay her for it. These moments are so spiritual and your poem speaks to the magic in that room when those tiny creatures come screaming (hopefully) into this world.
Beautiful job
Tim
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-01-07 17:26
*Smiles :)
that is so great! I bet she loves her job!
thanks for your comment.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-12-31 22:46
Beautiful
Makes me think of each of my children's birth...all very different ways they entered the world but the end result was the same. So beautifully written.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-01-02 17:09
dear Carrie,
I'm so very glad that I could touch your heart. thank you!
*hugs, Cat
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Clentin
Sun, 2023-01-08 02:14
A very beautiful and thought
A very beautiful and thought provoking poem.
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 10:35
thank you, Clentin
it is nice of you to say so!
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Clentin
Fri, 2023-01-13 14:19
Ps
Ps
We have just had a great grand child, I know what you are feeling.
Candlewitch
Fri, 2023-01-13 14:30
Congratulations
on the newest member of your family!!!
*hugs, Cat
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Rula
Sun, 2023-01-08 02:32
Congratulations!
Dear Cat! Well deserved indeed.
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 10:36
dear Rula,
thank you...it really surprised me!
*hugs and love, Cat
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-01-08 11:00
Congratulations
Well deserved. The contest had a lot of great entries this week.
Tim
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 15:17
thank you Tim, I read every one of them
yes...many great entries...I never imagined I would win :)
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Lavender
Sun, 2023-01-08 11:10
Congratulations, Cat!
Wonderful, tender poem!
L
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 15:19
thank you!
I appreciate your words and wishes.
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RoseBlack
Sun, 2023-01-08 11:15
Congratulations
A job well done!
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 15:21
dear RoseBlack,
thank you I thought your poem was amazing!
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Alex Tanner
Mon, 2023-01-09 09:23
Easy to read
Easy to read Cat, and a happy ending, terrible shame all births could not end like that. Alex
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-01-09 10:45
thank you Alex,
it seems as if you have had an experience not so wonderful. if so, I am sorry.
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Michael Anthony
Fri, 2023-01-13 13:24
Yay Cat - congrats!!! Best
Yay Cat - congrats!!!
Best
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Fri, 2023-01-13 14:33
LOL!
thank you Michael!
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Jakub Zoltowski
Fri, 2023-01-13 21:05
Winner of the month
I'd say look at my poem too the
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Tick Tock Shick
I am never enough I write to fulfil the act.
Act 1 GTA IV
Act 2 GTA VI Self promotion
Act 3 In be cil-o
Drop
mic-scuk
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But I like yours more :)
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-01-16 17:32
hello,
thank you for sharing with me.
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Clentin
Mon, 2023-02-13 12:39
Great poem, experienced
Great poem, experienced similar situations.
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-02-13 17:44
dear Clentin
that is wonderful news!
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Obadiah Grey
Mon, 2023-02-13 13:01
Pink and perfect,,,, that's
Pink and perfect,,,, that's all we need ! ( other hues acceptable and welcome )
nice one cat.
Obi.
Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-02-13 17:45
absolutely!!! *hugs, Cat
absolutely!!!
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