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give n take
If you give them an inch
And they take a whole mile
Give of things squirlish
Unholy and vile
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
squirlish had to go once I learned it had another meaning. there IS sometimes time for the ambiguous but perhaps not here in such a small blunt chunk of words belligerent.
Editing stage:
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Comments
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2014-10-19 22:50
Simon
Short and to the point. Your rhyming is on point. I've looked up the word squirlish and haven't found a definition. Will you enlighten me?
Very tempting ideology. Esp. when ppl take your kindness and stomp on.
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Simon Smythe
Fri, 2014-11-07 05:40
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Simon Smythe
Fri, 2014-11-07 05:32
thank you Barbara, I new that
thank you Barbara, I new that wasn't a real word and wish I'd made time sooner to check in. I find it hard to write about love so I guess another attempt will be good for me.
Simon
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2015-01-27 23:30
Simon
Still a great poem I like. Straight forward
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China Blue
Mon, 2014-10-20 09:41
squirilish
is not in the dictionary ( try wikipedia you will find it there), it is a slang Barbara and in this case ruins the meaning of the poem( in my opinion)
which even though is very short could be something good , I suggest extending it
"having the qualities of a squirrel
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Simon Smythe
Fri, 2014-11-07 05:34
good call
nice research China Blue, the word squirly is southern New Zealand slang for upset guts and from there I got squirlish. I agree it doesn't work in light of it's actual meaning although considering nobody really knows I might get away with it. I did try expanding it when I first wrote it but found there was nothing more to say. thank you.
Simon
(the people are scratching)
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2014-10-20 11:39
I don't know chrys
To each his own writing style. As for squirlish, it's the first I've heard of this word. As for slang, many are using more and more slang theses days so i expect to see it in poetry more common.
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Simon Smythe
Fri, 2014-11-07 05:35
Sguirlish is Kiwi slang too
Sguirlish is an NZ slang word describing a serious bout of bowel cramps.
"Aww Mum, I can't handle school today . . . I've got squirly guts."
I hope this helps - if nothing else it's onomatopoeic
- does it work?
lovedly
Fri, 2014-11-07 19:26
ignorance is no bliss ..waffling is like having a fling
1325-75; Middle English squirel < Anglo-French escuirel (Old French escuireul) ≪ Vulgar Latin *scūrellus, *scūriolus, representing Latin sciurus (< Greek skíouros literally, shadow-tailed ( ski (á) shadow + -ouros, adj. derivative of ourá tail); apparently so called because the tail was large enough to provide shade for the rest of the animal) with diminutive suffixes -ellus, -olus
Related forms
squirrelish, squirrellike, adjective
Be happy Don't worry always remember
LOUIS ARMSTRONG AND now me
Simon Smythe
Sat, 2014-11-08 04:21
oh boy . . .
I stand re-corrected! and so happily so
thanks for that lovedly - what we play is life
scribbler
Fri, 2014-11-07 15:31
Hi
"squirrely" is a word I've heard applied to a nervous person.........stan
Simon Smythe
Sat, 2014-11-08 04:28
thanks Stan
it suits me then - or was Stan the shaky one?
Ian.T
Fri, 2014-11-07 19:06
Hi All
A Squirl, is
A flourish in writing from way back in the 1800's.
Not used much after 1900 so I suppose to be squirlish is to be adept in writing as if waving a quill at a piece of parchment lol
Hope this helps..
Your write had been edited before I read the item and is OK as is,
Yours Ian . T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Simon Smythe
Sat, 2014-11-08 04:25
thank you Ian
kind words I take seriously
lovedly
Fri, 2014-11-07 19:19
friend
you are new
have u been inducted yet
ask your mentor to salvage you
you bet
squirl is like a squirrel's tail
have you observed one as yet
and so as I create new words
u might as well can
but once u have become
a self rated expert
o man
ask Stan
Simon Smythe
Sat, 2014-11-08 04:32
well shucks
my pride says to take the advice x