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Tutti Frutti

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Fri, 2014-10-03 02:39

Tutti Frutti

In my early teen years
gum was scarce to us kids.
Five girls two boys,
each uniquely creative,
we found ways to entertain ourselves.

We didn't chew much gum
or ate much candy,
mama and daddy got necessities
and cookie treats when they could.

My younger sister Janice Lynn
one day found sap on a spruce tree
in the yard near the road.
I couldn't imagine where she got the gum
she chewed.

We chewed sap that whole summer,
breaking bark from every tree we found.
There were none left on any tree
or in the wooden areas along the property.

I didn't know North America Indians
shared chewing gum from sap on a spruce tree
with settlers when they came to spy the land.

Last few words: 
Thanks Wesley. I finally learn to tell a story. Poetry dramatic verse is my new friend.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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raj

Fri, 2014-10-03 03:20

You have scripted the joyous phase of youth in this poem full of reminisce and youthful innocence and vigor.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Barbara Writes

Fri, 2014-10-03 12:29

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Thanks. I'm using the gift of storytelling I learn from Wes workshop.. I'm glad it all came together nicely descriptive and without knowing morh my words beautifully.

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emeka ozurumba

Fri, 2014-10-03 04:30

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if this is about the beautiful season Barbara i recommend this as simply brilliant from a genius ... very intricately connected, and in morphology you exorcise the theory called "localization"

Barbara Writes

Fri, 2014-10-03 13:09

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Theory of localization—I guess I did localized this. I also guess it is about a beautiful season. I didn't realized I wrote it that way. It is solely about collecting sap from a spruce tree and chewing it for gum as kids that roam with curiously. Im glad this came out of me.
Again, I'm glad my unintentional ability to write according to a theory called "localization" a theory I've never heard of bf now.
And Intricately connected, morphology,.. I amaze me with that talent or gift bc I was unaware I could do something I never heard of bf now...
Brilliance from a genius...I suppose I'll never tired of hearing that. Lol. I'm just a learning challenged Carolina country girl, with unknowest to me, untapped, talents and gifts from God that Neopoet friends encourage me to explore.

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