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Tras-os-montes revision
Each language comes with set of "sensibilites"foreign to many other cultures,and largely not understood. I wrote the following "poem"in continental Portuguese, the language of the FADO [see below]. I found myself going in a direction I didn't intend. The language brought me there.No Brazilian would ever have written anything like this, nor would they have understood it.There is a '"streak'" in my own writing n English that comes from a similar place.Neither is very appealing and often misunderstood as melodrama,which, in fact, it just may be.But poetry tells who we are.
Trás-Os-Montes
faz um milhão de anos
parece que
deixei os vales
trás os montes altos
acima do mar
onde a lua amarêla pålida
faixas de vermelho escuro
sangra noite
e a chuva entristece dia
Há lugares nêste mundo
onde vai a natureza
a chorar sua tristeza
lugares que seguem
o coração
onde quer que va
TRAS-0S-MONTES [ a harsh mountainous region in north-west Portugal]
I left the valleys
across the mountains
high above the sea
where the pale yellow moon
with streaks of deep red
bleeds the night
and a cold rain
saddens the day.
There are places in this world
where Nature cries her sadness.
Places that follow your heart
wherever you go
FADO
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Comments
Rula
Thu, 2014-01-02 12:49
Just beautiful joe
Each line speaks volumes to me and the last stanza is so special.
I would only suggest to make clear breaks for a smoother read, but it is great anyway.
Thanks for sharing.
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Geremia
Thu, 2014-01-02 13:45
Thanks, Rula. I will work on
Thanks, Rula. I will work on that
Joe
Seren
Thu, 2014-01-09 08:15
Dearest Joe
profoundly beautiful in its simplicity you really have a way of saying so much with so few words
as always a pleasure
there is always a minute sense of pain that I feel underlying each word it maybe just me eh ?
love your Jayne xxxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Geremia
Thu, 2014-01-09 13:15
You read me well. my Jayne.
You read me well. my Jayne. Yes.
with love from your Joe
Ian.T
Fri, 2014-01-10 19:19
Joe
Although you say this place is rugged and harsh Joe
It is a place of beauty held within your words.
Keep that place with you Joe, it is as my cave.
A place to feel safe from anything no matter about its physical form.
There you can call your loves to meet you and talk with you.
Find a spot there that is bathed in sunshine,
The eternal sunshine that has driven you all these years..
Loved it, can I borrow it if you don't really like it???
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geremia
Sat, 2014-01-11 08:11
I wish I were there now.
I wish I were there now.
Ian.T
Sat, 2014-01-11 10:17
Joe
Your thoughts are strong enough to take you there and to build that special place.
Then I shall expect an invite to walk there with you and to talk of true life.
Go well young Joe and know we think of you,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geremia
Sat, 2014-01-11 11:47
I struggle every day to
I struggle every day to "maintain"". Broken hip, parkinsons, I am alone and need to see to my own needs. I hope to get back to total mobility by March, but the loneliness is deadly.
joe