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Tick talks [Sunku Workshop]
Tick talks
of father time
is menacing
Intrudes
silence of
my solitude
Wrecking
wakeful sleep
like a witch hunt
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Editing stage:
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Comments
IRiz
Wed, 2018-02-14 10:57
Very good! Honest words. Real
Very good! Honest words. Real feelings.
The poem I love. It looks like a second take of the same theme that was in the Sunku with moon.
This one has your words, it is more unique.
It is better.
IRiz
raj
Wed, 2018-02-14 12:12
Thanks IRiz for the read and
Thanks IRiz for the read and your encouraging comment. Feels good to know I am improving..
Regards..
raj (sublime_ocean)