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Three Roses

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2016-09-25 16:53

Three Roses

If there were
only three roses
in your family tree

MOM

SISTER
and

WIFEY

and now you wanted a fourth
a DAUGHTER
who would you eliminate first
as only three roses
you can possess
answer my rosy story

many virgins will hear it
but from you not me ..

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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Sommer Lyn

Sun, 2016-09-25 17:01

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I wouldn't ever eliminate a loved one to try and acquire another loved one - to even consider it is a betrayal of sorts, I'd be more tempted to challenge the seemingly very arbitrary 'three rose only' rule. Why not grow a rose garden as opposed to a precarious few on a vine?

lovedly

Sun, 2016-09-25 21:33

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Lyn
You are wonderful
but this theory was just
arbitrary
thank you

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Sparrow

Mon, 2016-09-26 03:54

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A rose by any other name
would be just the same
so I would call all my other Kin
or friends by another name
thus to retain.
As my family tree goes back hundreds of years and it is a map of the past and present, would you think I could become a Chinese and only have one child??
In my house are many Roses,
They are all tended with equal love.
Shall I then listen to others and prune them.
NO!!!
Fun write, Yours Ian..

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lovedly

Mon, 2016-09-26 10:19

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with a million roses
plant some here too
if you can
call me by any name
never will it matter

i am lovedly
that's the whole chatter
grammar punctuation's besides
does not matter
find as many roses
as you may besides
enjoy your journey
and
i will my sojourn rides

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Esker

Mon, 2016-09-26 14:18

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and my girls...
drop chocolates off to my bank ladies
and the girls at work..
"If tell off the back of a truck!"
coffee often too...

the art of cordiality and civility is still
the supreme form of respect
many times the doors of the upper
classmen and eschelon opened
up too me and allowed me into
their sects of power wealth
and prestige..
holding up an arm to the lesser
then loudpieces
whom brought only stolen
grave flowers or weeds

why we posted gaurds so they
would not flatter or tyres or piss
in the petrol tanks....
ha ha..

why there is doormen
fronts people

flowers are a sacred tribute
the Rosecrusians of whom
I knew a few members
dedicate the purity of the
rose....King Henry used
the rose in the Tudor
times as his symbol of
ultimate breeding power
and respect..

thank U for writing about
a symbol of such beauty

Mr Esker!

lovedly

Mon, 2016-09-26 15:41

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rose on a plant or many roses on plants

spread but little fragrance see you gave roses to mummy she smelled them and shared with all she knew some passers by got the flavour free that was the kindness of your mummy and ah gfs so many give them a rose and like bees they shall come running chocolates too they'd love off you when in secret darkness they could only smell roses in their hair for which you spent searching in lovely locality come next time ask me roses i will send so many pay me for the roses only delivery is free but tell your mom and gals roses came from where no not the garden of Eden all now that tell them a friend a Loveldy sent the roses to them for a night of love and fragrance to lock up in your memory for times to come .Having said so much let me tease some one and convert this dialogue into a poem of everlasting rosy fragrance for times to come

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