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Thoughts
Thoughts on thoughts on thoughts
I never really gave them any thought
But as time goes on, my brain slowly rots
Forever consumed by my never-ending thoughts
Mindlessly clicking, scrolling, exploring
I wonder, does it ever get any less boring?
No, it doesn’t, but I can’t stop it now
It’s something my mind simply wont allow
I can’t let go of the memories we made
Each time you made my heart burn and ache
At the end of each day, it comes flooding back
Will these thoughts ever let me just sit and relax?
No, they won’t, because they come crawling back
Like a child waiting for an evening snack
They wait for my conscience to further yearn
For answers and truth I never did learn
At the end of each night, the end of each day
Is it worth laying down and staring into gray?
Is it worth laying down and rotting away?
Is it worth staying with you and selling each day?
Is it worth presenting myself as a display?
Is it worth holding back all the things I want to say?
No, it’s really not.
But hey, why give it thought?
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I wrote this because i always find myself trying to keep my mind occupied, especially at night when I’m trying to fall asleep. If I’m not always doing something or watching something, I feel kinda alone and get consumed by my thoughts. I hope someone else gets it.
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Mon, 2024-05-06 17:40
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Thoughts" delves into the theme of inner turmoil and the inability to escape from one's own thoughts. The repetition of the word "thoughts" effectively conveys a sense of overwhelming mental burden. The imagery of the mind slowly rotting and being consumed by thoughts is vivid and impactful. The poem also touches on the struggle to find meaning and purpose in the constant stream of thoughts and memories.
One suggestion for improvement would be to explore more varied and nuanced imagery to further engage the reader and evoke a deeper emotional response. Additionally, consider refining the structure and flow of the poem to enhance its overall coherence and impact. This could involve experimenting with different poetic devices such as metaphor, simile, or enjambment to add layers of complexity to the piece.
Overall, "Thoughts" captures the relentless nature of intrusive thoughts and the internal conflict they bring. By further developing the imagery and structure, the poem has the potential to resonate more powerfully with the reader.
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