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T U S S L E
foreground in silence
a breathless day
while the sun rises a mile away
a new jacket speaks
the leather voice
tiny passions in cold air
camera full of black and whites
your letters written
nothing trite
and how it is we concur
our addiction to this
blur
the strangers in the glass
ask seeking
why all the leaving
I move more towards
then against
hungry for everything
we shall not have
sated for nothing
that is all ours
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Comments
Esker
Sun, 2012-02-19 07:11
there are other poetic works
richer
emotive
cursive passion
and darkly tricked out
babe those are yours
You, you deserve them
and these
are the quiet musings
outside the private
realm
ot apt pupil
and distant teacher
Esker
Sun, 2012-02-19 16:53
yah its like the out of focus face
or the impressionist painting of the bartendress ladie
who had no reflection in the glass behind her
Little tricks to say
WTF
(Monet)
love those moments
living them is trippy but worth it sometimes
Thanks Lonnie!
lou
Mon, 2012-02-20 07:30
EASK
filled with sound.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Esker
Mon, 2012-02-20 11:12
Yes..we hear the stillness
on still days..how sound carries then
on either haze or clear cool days
and leather jackets..I owned two in my days
and own a beautiful bomber style one now
and in reflection we think of things too
Thank You
Esker
Wed, 2012-02-22 21:14
the shattered width
our heartbeat wave
flickering in this slick land
like rain winds beating
how you ride within
my love
how you glide thin
like a tender pressed
dream in the book
of silences....
weirdelf
Thu, 2012-02-23 08:44
This reads less like your seemless imagery
and more like a list.
It's still good, that is my only crit.
cheers,
Jess
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Esker
Thu, 2012-02-23 14:27
and a list it is..
poetry written
like thoughts ticked off
wants
needs
wants
needs
and dammit
thank you