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SWEET MAGNOLIA PROMISES

"Magnolia you sweet thing
you're driving me wild" *

you shame me with that phase
for i seek you out, but i am made afraid

i understand everything
and yet that changes nothing

for even as I speak
my words remain

hanging lifeless
on a dead frame

my psyche is human
but you have become inhumane

for i am the one
who is in exquisite pain

i am but a copy, a facsimile
of my own unravelled frame...

Bonitaj 11/23/10

*song by JJ Cale about New Orleans

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Very nice lyrics! So good to see you again.

always, cat

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Cat!!! so nice to have you back!!! I'll have to go and look down a few alley ways again to see if I can find you!!!
will check out your poetry soon too ;)
Bonita j

Bonitaj

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Sorry I've been so busy! Promise to stop by and see your stuff soon ;)
Cheers
Bonnie

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