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SWEET MAGNOLIA PROMISES
"Magnolia you sweet thing
you're driving me wild" *
you shame me with that phase
for i seek you out, but i am made afraid
i understand everything
and yet that changes nothing
for even as I speak
my words remain
hanging lifeless
on a dead frame
my psyche is human
but you have become inhumane
for i am the one
who is in exquisite pain
i am but a copy, a facsimile
of my own unravelled frame...
Bonitaj 11/23/10
*song by JJ Cale about New Orleans
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Candlewitch
Tue, 2010-11-23 12:01
hello Bonita
Very nice lyrics! So good to see you again.
always, cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Bonitaj
Tue, 2010-11-23 13:13
Meouw!
Cat!!! so nice to have you back!!! I'll have to go and look down a few alley ways again to see if I can find you!!!
will check out your poetry soon too ;)
Bonita j
Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Tue, 2010-11-23 14:05
Gee thanks Shirl!
Sorry I've been so busy! Promise to stop by and see your stuff soon ;)
Cheers
Bonnie
Bonitaj