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Soliloquy An Unheard Voice
A Voice Unheard Dramatic verse
I missed you, my son
so far away from home
unable to see you, touch you
don't you know I did all this
for you?
why wouldn't you talk to me
when I called?
greet me with silence?
I want to hear your voice
telling me about your day
about your school, your friends,
Grandma, everything
there's no need for us to grow apart
I love you like no other
I don't understand daddy
You said you love me
but you left me
without your warmth
I felt so lonely
and angry
It's all your fault
you chose your work over me!
It didn't changed much Alid. Just a tad. I sent it to me son. He said he love it
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Comments
alidzain
Sun, 2014-09-07 23:25
Hi Barbara
2nd stanza, the first line and second is missing the connection.
"why wouldn't you talk to
when I called"
You could do either one of these things. Add a "me" at the end of the first line or delete the "to".
Alid
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2014-09-08 00:22
Alid
Oh don't know how I took that out.
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