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Soliloquy A Storyteller is Born Dramatic Verse WS
A Storyteller Is Born Dramatic Verse Workshop
I watched in wonderment
as she talks about writing dramatic poetry
she sits here on her iPad lost in another world.
I called her name
to break the spell she seems to be under.
soliloquy a new word for me
and apparently for her too.
She rambles on a lot
causing me to tune her out
her enthusiasm for this subject
has caught my attention.
She just helped me to understand
the difference between
Twitter and Facebook.
now I'm like her rambling on and on
over my enlightenment there of
I think she has it now
her thoughts are coming together
more cohesive.
She said her dramatic poetry instructor
pulls no punches when he said keep it simple
a couple of times.
If I could get her do that in life
it would be grand
In her mind everything complex
is front and center.
As she write dramatic verses
I can see her joy
for storytelling bubble forth
just as this artesian well
that once flowed freely
on the side of a country road
has been capped off
some years ago.
She's slow to get things
just a child delayed in development,
but quickly catches up
when the right words spoken
chisels unearthing the inborn
talents and gifts in her.
She's always talking about her
precious baby the "Renga WS"
at Neopoet.
I can see the glow on her face and
the joy in her voice
when she talks about teaching
Japanese poetry to her poet friends.
I see she sleeping more
maybe this workshop
is much more than she expected.
Her work is grand
I'm not surprised
she usually excels
pushing through
her pain for gain.
Can't wait to see her closet play.
Last few words:
How did I do for my first ever storytelling and dramatic verse
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wesley snow
Fri, 2014-09-05 22:51
You did fine Barbara.
The first voice a poet goes to is her own. What I want you to think about is using a different voice. When I ask you to write a play (don't panic) you will need two or more voices that are not your own. Just give it some thought.
You're soliloquy is cute and I hope you truly want to keep trying to tell a tale.
Who knows... maybe you can get me to write a renga. Did I phrase that right? Is renga a poem or a bunch of poems? You see... we all have a lot to learn.
W. H. Snow
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2014-09-05 23:38
Wes
No you didn't. You can't write a renga. A renga is one poem not a bunch of poems. A renga is one poem written by many poets collaboratively to support one theme. Japanese origin, your verse compliments the last one in the poem. I am modernizing renga into a new style of poetry writing that supports one theme. At present "bird behavior" My "eternal renga" is an experiment in process. Never know it might catch on and be a style that's taught in schools, colleges, and universities. It may a universal form that's poets want in their portfolio for centuries to come. Lol ppl might write poetry books, books, articles and such about this American poet who took a Japanese poetry form and made it an America western poetry form. Me dreaming. Lol.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Fri, 2014-09-05 23:45
I will give it more thought.
I have no idea at this point how to pull a voice not my own from my thinking. Can you help me do that? I'm glad I did fine. Now I want to do it right.. Give me an ex of what I've written with your voice not your own.
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author commentwesley snow
Sat, 2014-09-06 11:33
The easiest way of doing this
is to create a personality first. Look at Stan's soliloquy. The character is Death, then he wrote his poem. My "voice" is Nephilim (the offspring of an Angel and a mortal). I created the personality first then attempted to "think" like him as I wrote his reflections.
With your soliloquy consider writing it entirely from your husband's point of view or for that matter... the dog. Seriously, what does the dog think of all the frustration your husband feels over FB and TWT (frustration I share).
When you begin your play do the same thing. Create two or more characters first, then allow them to speak through you.
For example... how about a conversation between a goose and a hummingbird hitching a ride. It doesn't necessarily have to tell a story. It can simply be those two characters getting along over the long ride or not getting along and arguing.
Once again... don't over think it. Keep it simple. Just let the characters talk for you and they will write the poem. All you have to worry about is making it poetry.
W. H. Snow
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2014-09-07 16:28
Wes
That cleared up a lot. Oh I just had the biggest dizzy spell sitting here writing this. Like a wallop to the side of the head. Its like being on a cruise ship be rocked by rough waters fiercely in my head and my body the ship.
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author commentwesley snow
Sun, 2014-09-07 11:38
Look what you did!
Very good. A very separate voice and good dramatic verse.
Bravo.
W. H. Snow
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2014-09-07 16:29
Thanks Wesley
I could not have done it without your patience.
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author commentRula
Mon, 2014-09-08 12:31
Well done barbara.
Well done barbara.
I like that you've chosen a theme close to you but chose someone's voice to express your feelings.
I second Wesley's bravo!
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2014-09-08 16:18
Rula
Thanks appreciate the comment.
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author commenteightmenout
Fri, 2014-09-12 14:06
Another poem that has made
Another poem that has made leaps and bounds in transformation. Half way through I would say this is my favorite thus far in the WS. Ending didn't get it done for me, though. I would like to see more of "her" and less of "you".
Scott
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2014-09-12 16:28
Thanks Scott
I made some changes to the ending. How's it works for you.
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author commentalidzain
Tue, 2014-09-16 01:11
Hi Barbara
You did it! Love this one. I think the ending is really works well.Kudos!
Alid
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2014-09-16 12:17
Alid
Thanks, glad it working.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Tue, 2014-09-16 12:16
Rewritten and submitted on blog
I've rewritten "the consequences of sin" A play about Adam and Eve to be more poetry. What do you think? Stan.
http://www.neopoet.com/barbara-writes/blog/tue-2014-09-16-1208-0#comment...
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