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Second Date
At the annual run in The City,
tortillas were pelting everyone, an eccentric tradition
Your Batgirl costume was unexpected
At the end of the course
bands were setting up on stage
With so many people around us,
our disguises were elsewhere
by then, no longer needed
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Free verse
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Last few words:
The Bay-to-Breakers race in SF is an annual event. Well, it was before the pandemic, anayway.
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Lavender
Sun, 2023-01-08 12:44
Second Date
Hi, Michael,
I looked up the Bay-to-Breakers Race - extreme fun! Have a blast if you go this year! So...quite the second date. :) Can't help but wonder what the third date was like, or if you remain forever on the second. This makes me smile.
Thank you,
L
Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-01-10 12:37
Still together! Thanks L!
Still together! Thanks L!
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 15:39
LOL!
I'll second Lavender on this! I'll bet you are still together!
love the poem, Michael.
*hugs, Cat
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Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-01-10 12:38
Thanks Cat! I guess I can say
Thanks Cat! I guess I can say I fell in love with Batgirl : )
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-01-10 12:41
Michael,
does that make you Batman? way cool! LOL!
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Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-01-10 16:06
Maybe, but without Bruce
Maybe, but without Bruce Wayne's millions - LOL!
Cheers
Michael Anthony
Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-01-09 04:55
Sweet
I hope there have been many more dates since this one. I’ll check out the event for certain. I can tell by the way you write that this person (your partner) is very special to you. This matter of fact recollection of a tender memory is exactly the type of stuff a romantic like myself is drawn too.
Tim
Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-01-10 12:39
Appreciate you sharing your
Appreciate you sharing your thoughts here Tim, thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony