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Saving Smiles
I gave pain an anesthetic sick of seeming pathetic
Cutting misery’s spleen with claws of wolverine
I threw melancholy off the tenth floor balcony
Agony I do ignore as she bleeds on the mahogany floor
Oh, such deeds are chaotic, maybe I’m psychotic
Or maybe I’m saving me with this vivid imagery
My smiles no longer a bastard, in me look what he’s mastered
Tonight, I give my pen to laughter, as she writes this chapter
No more waiting for the sun to rise I can close my eyes
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Apostolos "Paul...
Thu, 2012-01-12 23:38
thanks
Mark for stopping by
Apostolos "Paul...
Fri, 2012-01-13 04:30
lonnnie
thanksman
Candlewitch
Sat, 2012-01-14 13:14
hello paul,
I really related to this poem, especially these lines:
Agony I do ignore as she bleeds on the mahogany floor
Oh, such deeds are chaotic, maybe I’m psychotic
Or maybe I’m saving me with this vivid imagery
My smiles no longer a bastard, in me look what he’s mastered
Tonight, I give my pen to laughter, as she writes this chapter
No more waiting for the sun to rise I can close my eyes
I think this could be rapped!
always, Cat
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Apostolos "Paul...
Sat, 2012-01-14 17:31
thxcat
for stopping by
Esker
Sat, 2012-01-14 17:40
Poetic emerge Sense
Fantastic writing again Paul!
I think of graphic animation when
I read this,
or Storyboard art of which I love.
This poem has such a fast tense vibe about it.
"My smiles no longer a bastard!" wonderful
line.
Thank You!
(I'm inspired to write with Punctuation.)
Apostolos "Paul...
Sat, 2012-01-14 17:45
esker
thx for stopping by
China Blue
Sat, 2012-01-14 21:32
paul
My smiles no longer a bastard
now that is an interesting way of wording
Nice going you are evolving as Lon staed
Chrys
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Apostolos "Paul...
Sat, 2012-01-14 21:36
ha
thx for stopping by
Nordic cloud
Mon, 2012-01-16 14:08
This is wonderful. I love it,
This is wonderful. I love it, nothing to add. Richly interesting poem Paul.
Ann
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Apostolos "Paul...
Mon, 2012-01-16 19:57
ann tanks
for stopping by