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Satellite

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Sun, 2024-03-03 13:34

She danced for her friend the moon
most nights. And occasionally during the day,
when its appearance couldn't be subdued.

Sometimes she wished all of her friends
could be here with her. All of them
had spent time under the same moonlight.

The same light knew them all
and shared this connection with her,
inspiring joy in the spectacle of her performances,
rewarding her companion of the night.

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Free verse
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Neopoet Weekly 03/03/24 to 03/09/24
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Lavender

Mon, 2024-03-04 22:27

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Hello, Michael,
I can interpret this poem in so many different ways when defining who "she" may be. I can imagine a literal human being dancing in the captivating moonlight, but I can also imagine the poem is speaking of the Earth. And of course, it may be speaking of a man-made satellite, but the romantic in me is leaning toward a natural satellite, amazing and spectacular.
Thank you!
L

Michael Anthony

Tue, 2024-03-05 14:13

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I tend to the literal in much of my poetry, and hadn't really considered your interpretations - but I love it! Re-reading from your POVs, I can see this in ways that I really like as well. Thank you for showing me this!

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Michael Anthony

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