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For Lady Jayne

For Lady Jayne

Across the sea in wee Taree
a lady bard resides
her name is Jayne and soothing rain
her poetry provides

she writes of kings and needful things
of pleasure and concern
tales of old and fires bold
within her verses burn

beyond the pale of Fairy tale
her words are songs of sooth
she bares her soul to reach a goal
transcending paltry truth

through the years she’s faced all fears
and triumphed through her trials
battled pain and more again
yet still her beauty smiles

her will is strong and like her song
it comes from deep within
that special place behind her face
where Austral dreams begin

Serenity and sanity
shine brightly from her eyes
compelling us to end our fuss
and share her bright surprise

C. Lon R. Bruso

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Structured: Western
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My humble gift to a very talented Lady!
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I feel so privelaged you and Chrys have been so kind to me and I will always be your friends, I love the poem and will treasure it always ... hope you guys had a blast at Jess's Wedding

I am in shock a lovely shock

Love you both to bits, hope you know that

Lady Jayne of the Dreamtime ;)

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

You are most welcome! I have been wanting to do a piece for you for some time now, and I finally got up the courage to attempt it! I'm so happy that it pleases you!

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This one is a wonderful gift for Jayne!

Alid

Appreciate the read and the kind words!

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A wonderful piece for our Aussie Boudicca, this Bard fights a fight that would put many man to shame.
It is a lovely piece for her and I see it has already wet her eyes.
There are few in this world that I walk with always and our Jayne is one of them, we walk in times of laughter and of illness holding each other in times when needed.
Thank you again and take care young Lonnie, Yours as always, Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Your comments and opinions are always most welcome, and I am glad you found this piece suitable for Jayne!

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Our Jayne has adopted me as an extra Da, this is a privilege.
I have since Jayne arrived here on Neopoet supported her writes and many things that she has needed over the years.
Now a book of her works is on the press and available to those that would like a copy.
I have supported Jess and Jayne for years now and it has been a roller coaster of feelings, and as you know I send my unconditional love to all I meet.
I thank you again for the thoughts that are with the write, there is the true meaning behind the words,
Yours as always, Ian

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

what is the title of the book? If possible I want to get it to support her in her journey and to get myself inspired with her art. I'm her fan and her friend.

Alid

She already said she loves it and that's what matters most..........stan

When I told Stan he was best in West
He said nope read Lonnie
so I came here as
a luny moony
Read your poetry
will read more of it

How is Judy
she is a good poetic lady

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