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IRAQNOPHOBIA by Ziggy and Lou
I pay homage to the soldiers
who took charge ,when words failed
those who ordered the
execution of our youth.
I pay homage to soldiers
who are now departed,
A clear blue sky divides
the living from the dead.
Breathtaking sunsets creep
unfolding on to troubled horizons,
gaining ground.
Whilst those that are left cry,
" hear me lord, bring them home to me”.
United they stand in bloodshed
targets acquired to shield politicians.
Shoot to kill.
What's fair about warfare?
No one wins.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
ziggy
Fri, 2010-10-29 18:26
hi
hi there I see its posted lol
it was as always a good exercise writting with you and I feel we will co-write again you kick it of next time ok chat soon my friend ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
lou
Fri, 2010-10-29 23:03
Ok
Zig
I have the perfect co write I will email it to you
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Sat, 2010-10-30 11:25
JC
thank you. the whole site feels strange, but exciting, because there seem to be a chance to make Neo even better.
Lou xx
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Sat, 2010-10-30 11:26
shirl
thanks for he kind comments
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Sat, 2010-10-30 12:09
xena
thanks
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Race_9togo
Sat, 2010-10-30 14:44
This is good.
At my church we recently protested the 9th anniversary of the Afghan war.
The sentiments expressed there have been encapsulated exactly and succinctly in your poem. well done.
Respectfully,
Jim
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
lou
Sat, 2010-10-30 22:35
Hi
Thank you very much
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
judyanne
Sun, 2010-10-31 00:03
lou and ziggy
great write, very powerful
you two work well together.
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
lou
Sun, 2010-10-31 06:42
Hi Judy
Its great to hear from you.
thank you
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Hooded Stranger
Tue, 2010-11-09 13:10
Lou & Zigs
I have to say the title grabbed the highlight for me...so very perfect.
The write itself is well crafted and carries a strong view-point.
I think I can work out who wrote what, but I am very familiar with both your styles, so I had an advantage.
Great co-write my friends,
HS
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ziggy
Wed, 2010-11-10 08:47
HI
CHEERS hood i'm sure you could pick out our lines
would you try and do that it would be interesting lol,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
lou
Tue, 2010-11-09 23:38
HS
I thank you and I'm sure Zigs does to. I'm curious to know which bits you feel I wrote
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Eumolpus
Tue, 2017-07-18 17:34
Yes how utterly sad for the soldier
treated no more than an insect by the powers that be. I appreciate your poem but have to think it's not that nobody wins...one side wins, and for most of our history made life miserable for the conquered. This continues today. As to why we are conquering ourselves in the first place..
have we really evolved more than the chimpanzees, who make war on each other just like us. I would like to think I have, and you have, so we just have to get everyone to agree to just not do it.
The Beatles were right, as was Auden, "we must love one another or die". I think Jesus said something about that too, among a few others.
I love this stanza!
Breathtaking sunsets creep
unfolding on to troubled horizons,
gaining ground.
Whilst those that are left cry,
" hear me lord, bring them home to me”.
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
youkay
Mon, 2019-01-07 05:55
Love it
The theme down to the choice of words is amazing
Pleasure I am the promised gift