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Imagine

Submitted by Mark on Sun, 2024-04-21 02:43

Imagine there is heaven,
Consciousness of a feeling,
Euphoria that cannot be found,
Whilst we live attached to our ground.

Grounded only in truth,
Or lies that grow from false reality,
Spawned by temporary enlightenment,
What grows to ingest by you and me.

A taste of imagine,
The hurt of permanent transcendence,
Or slowing to stop then move on,
Imagine there is heaven.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft
Contest: 
Poetry Month 2024 Imagine
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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zuella

Sun, 2024-04-21 03:34

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This hit me really hard, the first line really drew me in because I actually tried clicking out of the website and then I just couldn’t until I finished it and I’m really glad I did. I loved the way I could picture everything without there being much intentional imagery. I really liked this! Keep it up

-zuella

The normal fear the poets and the poets fear the normal.
Thank you for your time!
-Zuella

Mark

Sun, 2024-04-21 16:42

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Thank youfor your kind comment and time spent reading. When I was finished with it as is the first thing I was aware of was the lack of imagery. So I decided to post it and see what sort ofcomment it brought especially on imagery.
You made my day!
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