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I Always Think Of You

I didn't know what to expect when I first met you
I never met someone quite like you
so down to earth so tried and true
and even though you may not think so yourself
as i've told you before i find you quite sexy too
I hope i'm not being too forward when i say this
but i do want to pursue things with you
I know i tend to get quite around you at times
trust me when i say it's not you
I've had my heart broken a time or two
it's hard to trust someone new this so soon
but i want to try with you
just give me time I'll come around
It doesn't take me that long to open up
once you have my heart I'll always be true to you
I believe you could help me come out of my shell
to help me open up more
are you willing to take the time
babe i'm worth waiting for
I know I don't say it enough but i do care
I just have to know first hand are you planning on sticking around?
Are you going to give me that chance?
I've been hurt before I know you have too
but i promise you this I won't do that to you
All things said and done just know that no matter what
you have captured my heart
Although I'll admit I was scared at first to open up
to let you in you proved to me in a short time
that i can trust you with my heart
and that i can feel safe with you
I'm ready to let you in let you know what i'm all about
I know I never told you this but i am glad that you chose me because if you didn't I wouldn't had gotten the chance to know what a great guy you really are
I can already tell this early on
You seem to have a heart of gold
I want you just as much as you want me
babe I hope you know
i may be a little shy around you right now but soon that will fade
I want you to know that my feelings for you are real
and even when i don't tell you I really do care
I'm really trying to make this work
I'm willing to take a chance with you
if you're willing to take a chance with me
I hope this doesn't scare you away
I'm only letting you know how i feel
that what's in my heart is real
And even when I don't say it out loud
I always think of you

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Every man would always want to write this kind of letter to a woman. I see you have poured your heart in the letters used. Now wait for a reply. Lol!

THE PLACE OF PUNCTUATION:
Some of the lines need a slight pause then continue a new line. Read aloud and you will understand what I meant.
Example:
I;m ready to let you in let you know what i'm all about

Edit this line: hope
I (hopw) this doesn't scare you away

Nice job!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Thank you so much for the feedback!

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This is beautiful. It’s a very personal organization of thoughts on paper. I do this often myself. When my wife and I are struggling and I feel like it’s time for the difficult conversations that people usually avoid to their own detriment, I write everything I’m feeling down. When I go back and read it, there’s a lot that I attribute to raw emotions reacting and not true feelings of a calm mind. In this way I’m practicing cognitive behavioral therapy but also finding out what feelings are the real deal and what feelings are responses conditioned by a lifetime of tiny traumas.

You’re an excellent writer. Please continue,
Tim

P.S. in an impulsive and shameless move: please check out my music releases. The links are in my bio. Pretty please.

Thank you so much! Great music as well.

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