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Hope
Faces brighten when I am near
People prepare for things to come
I bring cheer to those in despair
When you feel you have lost everything
Do not lose hope
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Comments
samary
Thu, 2019-10-10 09:42
This is such an emotive
This is such an emotive subject that perhaps 5 lines is a little short.
I would love to see how you bring comfort rather than being told I would love to feel the emotion of you holding out your hand. This has so many possibilities.
I like the beginning that you jumped in to the heart of this .
I would love to see a different title you have used hope in the last line so you could use your title like an extra line or a metaphor to pull the reader in.
How are you seeing hope? what are its characteristics?
what else has similar characteristics?
Tease out your thinking that will give you some ideas for an interesting title that will compliment your poem.
I am thinking things like
Beacon of Light
Comfort Blanket
Knotted Rope
See if you can come up with something new for your poem.
Sam