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Her Majesty of the Purple Mountains

<p>O' dutiful... the racist lies .....
For dapper knaves at play
America... America - Lady Liberty of mass mediocracy
God shed his grace on thee but look at what you've become
See what you have done
How are we to crown good when a brotherhood would send you to grave?
A burial may be better than the bed you're in today.
Politicians turned to pimps -Campaigns running as you limp.
Elected pricks prepared strip constitutional rights- judicial processes eschewed
Prostitution is first resort of institutional pundits too practiced at "G-night 2U"
Laws are not like strong condom when punctured as standard procedure
We believed you'd protect us- but supreme justice is not on Earth.
I hope they paid you what you're worth before the parting shot
Each drop of corruption is more squat manifest from coddled tush.
Filibuster is form of foreplay before the big push- or suck on mama's bottle
Millions of miniature attorneys speeding down congressional tract Ready to attack womb -
you should've been ground to room inside
Your filth ratified and fertilized by public action committees
lobbyists from affiliated hobbyists - The origin of toilets with stalls
Beware the fall! Begin the pity!
For citizeny, is silly afterbirth of nationalized neonatal cause
To honor her on the designated days with marching band.
Future children will be abandoned, at least not aborted.
Innocent lives distorted by gruesome plans -born of your consent
The future is fomented from dementia of ancient hags in tangles
But be wise -not forget fools drooling of religious fisher-men with nets
They'll inspire as she leaves child on fire house steps in Walmart bag
With silver spoon and empty bottle, swaddled in a spangled rag</p>

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...a lot going on here. I assume there is some hostility in your piece, but I'm not sure if it is directed at a particular group, or just a generalization of the state of politics.
A lot of your lines read a little like headlines, or contain fractured thoughts. I'm assuming it's intentional. I rarely promote politics in poetry, but I do welcome new poets.

Welcome to Neopoet.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

An excellent piece full of headlines as Thomas has said. I enjoyed your tirade, good job. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

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