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Fun with Microbes

eyes engaged with tiny breeds
moving around at a wiggly pace
back and forth I move the lens
to focus with its eyepiece grids

I wave to them with a gentle Hello
but they sneer back at my eye
get lost they said from below
please leave us alone, don't spy

tears in my eyes fogged the lens
for a moment they're out of sight
surely I'd caused them fright
to me they looked so tense

I sent them a wish to befriend
and asked them how they feel
it's too hot in oven they said
when left alone with our meal

I slid my way down the scope
to meet my friends in wait
but they tied me up in a rope
it turned out to be my fate

so I spent the night in a petri dish
floating in the agar like dead fish
the culture there made me sore
i just couldn't get back ashore

they said they had enough of me
so they stuck me down with glue
i found i couldn't move my knee
for they had touched me with flu

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Free verse
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This is absolutely of great fun till I get to that last line. I don't envy you :)
I know this is free verse but there are few lines

just an example
" get lost they say from there below" try to take out the word 'there' then read it aloud... does it read better?
V. Enjoyable
Thanks for sharing
P.s. still on my cell phone :)

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thanks for the time to read and provide suggestion...taking them into account I have tidied up many lines making them shorter...hope this now flows smoother....good to know you had lots of fun reading it...

In fact..besides fun I also wrote this to practice rhyme which is my weak area...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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we get the flu! It is a little quirky, but it's fun. Strange vision.

Just thinking maybe could begin..."I dreamt ..." Then you wake up with the flu!

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Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

for taking tome to read and make a suggestion. It is appreciated.
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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