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Uncoil, with gradual breaths
Open your eyes ,refocus,
twenty twenty vision..
Free
span the breadth
and width , expand.
Laugh, cry, scream
Let it all out.
Expose yourself to reality.
Free.
span the breadth
and width,
expand.
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Bonitaj
Sun, 2010-11-21 11:08
Loved
this exhortation to BE YOURSELF! Freed up to enjoy it!!
Nice one Lou!
Boni
Bonitaj
lou
Mon, 2010-11-22 00:49
Boni
Thanks
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
judyanne
Mon, 2010-11-22 03:54
everybody need to take this advise....
good write lou
did you notice your line breaks with the repeated stanza?
'span the breadth
and width , expand. '
'span the breadth
and width,
expand.'
did you mean to make them different? just me - i think it looks tidier if they're the same
love and hugs
judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)