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Falling Like Nine Pins
Falling like nine pins
Friends living like jolly good neighbours
with a daily
hi and bye
smiles
the weather is lovely
sunny
a bit cloudy
yet we smile at each
the sunset is as beautiful as before
hope to like it see, many more
but for the un-promised tomorrow
bye and hi till comes a new morn
a new day is born
the bell continues to toll daily
you are gone
last of the set of nine pins
sad we wil smile
no more
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Kristen H.
Sun, 2023-01-15 09:23
Love this!
I love the John Donne reference. Love the style. Love the message. Well done!
lovedly
Sun, 2023-01-15 09:56
Kind thanks for your maiden comment
By the way who is JD
does he know me
Kristen H.
Sun, 2023-01-15 12:41
John Donne
is a poet. He wrote For Whom The Bell Tolls (No Man is an Island). The same poem that was inspiration to Metallica for their song For Whom The Bell Tolls. If you haven't yet read it, I definitely recommend giving it a read. :)
lovedly
Sun, 2023-01-15 12:48
thanks never knew all this since school they said FOR WHOM THE .
thanks never knew all this
since school they said
FOR WHOM THE BELL TOLLS
Kindly send me a link
or here the poem ink
o great poet
KH
Kristen H.
Sun, 2023-01-15 21:15
Here's the poem
No man is an island,
Entire of itself.
Each is a piece of the continent,
A part of the main.
If a clod be washed away by the sea,
Europe is the less.
As well as if a promontory were.
As well as if a manor of thine own
Or of thine friend's were.
Each man's death diminishes me,
For I am involved in mankind.
Therefore, send not to know
For whom the bell tolls,
It tolls for thee.
Simon
Sun, 2023-01-15 15:11
Lovely
This is a wonderful piece, but I'm a little bit confused about the third line of the third stanza.
(Hope to of it see many more) I need a little light in here
lovedly
Mon, 2023-01-16 10:41
THANKS REVIEWed
MY STYLE POEM THOUGH
Lavender
Sun, 2023-01-15 18:17
Falling Like Nine Pins
Hi, Lovedly,
I picture a lovely group of friends sharing a lifetime together, and facing the circle of life. A little sad, but also very keen and respectful.
Lav
lovedly
Mon, 2023-01-16 07:21
Since we now belong to an age soon to be gone
Since we now belong to an age soon to be gon
nine pins fall
few left after all
we all fall