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Dear brother
You've split blood
To tender your seed
And stained your walls
With the fishy smells of greed,
Now you dance melancholy
To the rhythmic drums of shame
Of the crafty hands
You moulded.
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-07-19 02:31
dear Favour Bariduanen
you have a good start for a poem. I would like to see you flesh it out with some details and history. thank you. welcome to Neopoet!
always, Cat
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