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Daisy

Named after a flower
So bright and so sweet
With chocolate brown eyes
She was hard to beat

A German Shepherd
I've had all my days
She and my brother, oh
They were together always

She was sweet and gentle
Wouldn't hurt a fly
She loved all fiercely
Makes you wonder why

She had to die that way
After all those years
In a vet in a small town
In a room soaked with tears

She was not in pain
She was only sleeping
But as it all ended
I prayed I was dreaming

I know it was irreparable
It was the merciful act
I know if she could, she
Would thank me for that

She went on peacefully
In a calm, easy way
And if dogs go to heaven
She's waiting there today

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Written in tribute for Daisy, my German Shepherd who passed away yesterday.
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Daisy" beautifully captures the deep bond between the speaker and their beloved German Shepherd. The imagery of Daisy being named after a flower and described as sweet and gentle creates a vivid and heartfelt portrayal of her character. The poem effectively conveys the emotions of love, loss, and the difficult decision to let go.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the rhyme scheme and meter throughout the poem to enhance its flow and rhythm. This could help maintain the reader's engagement and create a more dynamic structure. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices such as metaphor or symbolism could add layers of depth to the emotional journey depicted in the poem.

Overall, "Daisy" successfully evokes a sense of nostalgia and love for a cherished companion. By experimenting with poetic techniques and refining the structure, the poem has the potential to further resonate with readers and amplify its emotional impact.

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So sorry for your loss. A touching piece indeed with a title of my favorite flower.. Well written with raw feelings well expressed.
I see it's a polished version so I have only so much appreciation for sharing with us
Best wishes.

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Hello, Shelby,
Lost an unconditional loving furry sweetheart, myself, once. Sounds like Daisy was a wonderful, gentle soul. I like to think that our companion's good nature is spread out there someplace where it's needed, always lingering, spreading continued joy.
Beautiful!
Thank you!
L

They're hard to let go of, that's for sure. But I agree; they're always with us in spirit.

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my hope is that she is happily waiting for you near the gates. it is apparent that loved each other dearly. you were bravely heroic in saving her from pain.

*hugs, Cat

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