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Berated, and Belated

Submitted by docmaverick on Thu, 2011-01-20 04:07

My parents were "venti" mentors,
my grandparents were demi-gods;

close families, and other associates
did influence me, against all the odds!

I've yet to get things, exactly correct,
so, the lessons I still try, and learn;

someday, if the planets ever do line up, right
then maybe, it'll really be my turn.

Don't get me wrong, I'm as "slap-happy" as,
any simple-minded man aught ever be;

the only trouble with that equasion, I've found
is that I'm much more, a complicated man...than, he!

For instance, my younger brother, Tony
had a birthday, on Facebook.....yesterday;

but, in all of my limited wisdom
I never said, what I sorely NEEDED to say!

So now, at 12:47 a.m.
after having, his whole birthday to speak;

I find, what I'm writing at, "twilight",
is what I should've said.....earlier, this week!

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
Last few words: 
Happy Birthday, Tony! love, Dave.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

docmaverick

Thu, 2011-01-20 11:15

docmaverick's picture

...it's my "slap-happy" character! Lol! And you're a "funny bunny", too!
Thanks for reading,
doc.

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