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A Single Red Rose

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Wed, 2011-06-29 00:03

A single red rose on my pillow
Sweet-smelling cologne
Invaded my
Nous, while its
Glitzy petals
Lie quiescent in the moonshine
AWOL the sunshine

Rosette’s spiny stalk
Encased with golden silver trimming
Draped my singular reddish rose

Roseate dawn
Overtook the dusk
Silencing nocturnal prattle, that
Entered my chamber

At the dawning ascension
A single red rose on my pillow betrothed my forgiveness

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Roscoe Lane

Wed, 2011-06-29 00:14

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The only thing i'd change in this beautiful poem is, take the Y away from silvery. Really enjoyed this poem. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Barbara Writes

Wed, 2011-06-29 00:22

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I made the change and think it better also
I like your signature it is so true
i just finished writing this a few minutes ago.
i guess Chrys cliche' workshop inspired me to write this so i can experiment with more uncommon words in my poetry.

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