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Deeply Suppressing

I'm really sad
Fighting getting mad
About what I can't have

I don't wanna talk
So I'll go for a walk
And sit in a park

I'm seeing doubles
Guess, I'll blow bubbles
To mask my troubles

I'm sick at heart
My belly starts
To expand with farts

It's kinda funny
I'm feeling hungry
Can't eat or function

Deeply suppressing
My depressions
About life successes

I can't fit in
Cause, I'm too broken
To make any sense

I'm a sheep lost
In the road crossing
Counting my losses

I'll bury my head
In a sand bed
Until I'm well fed

With love and praises
Hugs and kisses
I'll stand like daises 

 

  

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Ibam coming uP wit some weird lines just to rhyme
Rhyming is not me best area
Practicing to become more profecient at it
How am I doing with rhymIng

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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I really like your rhyme
Can I keep for myself
I'll always give you credit for it

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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Thanks

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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