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Docmaverick
United States
Submitted by docmaverick on 2 August 2007 - 1:10pm.
Style / Type:
Western Classic
I was riding the bus
it seemed like for hours,
when I noticed an older man
and he was holding some flowers.
I kept admiring them
now and again,
when he suddenly came over
and said, “Excuse me, friend…
I noticed you looking
at the flowers, and me,
and I think that my wife
would like you to have them, you see.
I’ll simply explain
that I gave them away,
to a nice stranger I met
on my bus ride, today.”
Well, I thanked him, and watched him
exit the bus all alone,
and walk into a small cemetery
and kneel at a lone headstone.
(2 votes)

Well, well
Well i liked to read it. It make your head thing, and that’s good. I only think that the title could me more … hmm… diferent!
Poetic indeed, this was a
Poetic indeed, this was a very good read, it was sweet and sad at the same time. Thanks for the read!!!!
Brittany Rae
Hm
after i read this that was litterly my reaction, i liked this peice.
a. m. painter
very affective story,
i personally think you lose a bit of direct emotional connection by stretching for rhyme.
cheers,
Jess